Tearing the Sky

[BeeCrest]

Wanting to gaze into your eyes,
as the break of day took everything,
Wind's sweet harmony greeted the clouds,
as the sky tore open to welcome it all.

The overflowing hope masked reality,
forever did I wait for you to find me.
Held by the fragments of the past,
forever did I cling to my memories of you.

(Sorry it's short, but I'm having writer's block. I've given up, so help please XD)

[Lolable]

woah Bee lol this is so awesome i<3 it yes short but VERY lovely

[BeeCrest]

Thanks. Originally it didn't seem like it would make sense to anyone but me, so I made a few changes and hopefully it does make sense. I think I'll leave it short.

[Katen Kyoukotsu]

Sometimes short can be better than long. It sends a more to the point and powerful message than alot of other poems.

[Dounick]

short.... and sweet
thats what i like

short and sweet
i give you a 2 thumbs up on this one