Romance

[Lenne]

Romance


Drops of morning dew
Glittering upon luscious petals.

Your strong hand holding mine.
Gentle smile linger, sincerity.

Delicate blossoms bloom,
Petals drifting on the wind.

Your eyes gazing deeply.
Entranced soul, warmth.

The fragrance of spring
Wafting upon the breeze.

Your heartfelt laughter.
Beautiful moments, dream.

The sunshine upon rainbows,
Flourishing splash of life.

Sweet unattainable romance,
Beneath the cerulean skies.

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April 24, 2006

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hmmm, i wonder if anyone can spot the irony in this piece, most of my other reviewers on another site didnt catch itXD

[Icestorm]

romance most of the time isnt always sun shine and rainbows?

[Dounick]

hmm..... its very well done, maybe one of the only peices that anyone has ever writen and that i might be able to understand

if im correct you are talking about this love that is so wonderous, and the reader can almost tell that the person has it, but in th end, it is "sweet unattainable romance" and that the person is only imagining it?

O.o i dont know if i made and sense here whatsoever, because i confused myself ever so greatly >.>

[Icestorm]

yeah actually well done dude that sounds exactly right..

[Dounick]

hmmm.... we will only know when shiz comes on, till then... i think im doing ok at decyphering things ^_^
>.>

[Lolable]

yeah i agreew ith icy but wat iliked the way u desribed
ur talented by nature shiz MORE :p:

[emmasu]

well am not sure, though its a nice topic, i feel like what you have written is only feelings,
i mean that you only wrote feelings, you did not write a real poem,
i do not know how to explain it,
ok, why do not you try again and try to explain whats going on, and every time you finish writing a poem or anything, read it and try to feel the things that you are trying to tell, with that way, you will know if its in the same direction that you want

[Ai]

...Romance....

Is probably more confusing then wonderfull...

But hey it's really well written and metaphorically nice.....I hope to see more pieces from you..

[Lenne]

hmm..... its very well done, maybe one of the only peices that anyone has ever writen and that i might be able to understand

if im correct you are talking about this love that is so wonderous, and the reader can almost tell that the person has it, but in th end, it is "sweet unattainable romance" and that the person is only imagining it?

O.o i dont know if i made and sense here whatsoever, because i confused myself ever so greatly >.>

:eek: omg, you got it perfectly right^^ yay! someone actually read this closely! *huggles nick* thats my e-hubby for ya^_~ w00t! only about 1 other person out of 30 on the other site said the same thingXD

@emmasu: mmm, wats wrong with just writing feeling? wat would art be without feelings and emotions. to tell you the truth, i know exactly what i'm writing, i knew exactly wat direction this poem was going and wat it meant, its up to the readers to understand it. poetry isnt always as plain as a book, or sometimes, it could be just imagery, or even pointless imagery, but in the end, people appreciate it for what it is and what it has to offer.^^

@yoru: thanx! *hugs e-daughter*

@everyone else: thanks for commenting on my work, really appreciate it!

[Dounick]

:eek: omg, you got it perfectly right^^ yay! someone actually read this closely! *huggles nick* thats my e-hubby for ya^_~ w00t! only about 1 other person out of 30 on the other site said the same thingXD

:eek13: well i may have figurde it out, and i can understand it in my mind...... i just cant read what i wrote anymore :LOL:

[Icestorm]

lol nick! you've gone partially blind?? haha

@shizori: exactly.. poetry can be anything aslong as it has feeling

[Lenne]

mmhm, well, i dont mind comments on context or lines that are awkward ppl, just try to keep clear of telling me exactly what to write^^ or what i write is wrong, cuz there is no such thing as poetry that is wrong.

[Icestorm]

agreed, its up to the user.. it can be completly imagination based yet is still correct, like a story.. and I dont really have any comments, its great.

[Lenne]

lol, thanks ice:)

[emmasu]

shizori i think you got me wrong, what i meant is that you peom was only feelings and about feelings, like, when you write the feelings " happy, sad, angry" this way,
i wanted you to write those feelings in a more story way so we can call that apoem, when you write it that way, it will be much better
and i know the poetry is about feelings

[Lenne]

shizori i think you got me wrong, what i meant is that you peom was only feelings and about feelings, like, when you write the feelings " happy, sad, angry" this way,
i wanted you to write those feelings in a more story way so we can call that apoem, when you write it that way, it will be much better
and i know the poetry is about feelings

mmm, and you still dont get what i'm trying to say. does a poem really have to have a story to be called a poem? why cant a poem have no structure but only to ellicit emotions? so writing about only feelings cant be considered a poem? and did u see me write only the words 'happy, sad, angry'? i dont consider myself elementary when it comes to writing poetry, and if you cant seem to consider my style as poetry and continue to call this not a poem, dont read and comment.

not all poems have to be stories, this isnt a ballad. not poems have to make complete and utter plain sense to be good. if i wrote this in a story format that defeats the purpose of the whole poem and you might as well be asking me to write another one that IS a story.

i'm sorry, but you hit a nerve, there are some comments that are crossing the line. as my writing teacher said, comment on what is already written, not what you think should be written.

[emmasu]

mmm, and you still dont get what i'm trying to say. does a poem really have to have a story to be called a poem? why cant a poem have no structure but only to ellicit emotions? so writing about only feelings cant be considered a poem? and did u see me write only the words 'happy, sad, angry'? i dont consider myself elementary when it comes to writing poetry, and if you cant seem to consider my style as poetry and continue to call this not a poem, dont read and comment.
not all poems have to be stories, this isnt a ballad. not poems have to make complete and utter plain sense to be good. if i wrote this in a story format that defeats the purpose of the whole poem and you might as well be asking me to write another one that IS a story.
i'm sorry, but you hit a nerve, there are some comments that are crossing the line. as my writing teacher said, comment on what is already written, not what you think should be written.
i think you got me wrong again, but anyway am sorry i did not mean to say that your peom is not apeom, am sorry