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iladys
06-25-2006, 10:30 AM
The long corridors,
with its white floors, ceilings and walls,
Are all that surrounds me,
In this empty abyss.

Haunting my senses,
the shadows of yesterday;
Haunting my memories,
the shadows of you.

Your shadow is ahead of me,
Though beyond my reach;
Yet I run as fast as I can,
For that person I wish to keep.

I saw you moving away from me,
Yet I stayed and stood my ground;
Until you were gone, was that I realised,
That such strong feelings were found.

Your shadow goes beyond a light,
And turns around to face me;
Just as I grasp that outstretched hand,
It evanesces away from me.

Suddenly all my surroundings,
From white, have turned to grey;
No more am I running for that shadow,
For that shadow does not remain.

They say time waits for no man...

I had failed to realise that neither does this.

Helikaon
06-25-2006, 11:14 AM
wow.. soo good.. gave me shivers up my spine.. very descriptive piece, i like it alot

emmasu
06-26-2006, 07:19 AM
i like it too, good job iladys

Rising Phoenix
06-27-2006, 09:32 PM
Agree with icestorm gave me the shivers! Very nice :).

R.P.

yumisan
06-29-2006, 07:42 AM
very nice one...it really does gave me a shiver.great job.
*offer cakes to nee-san*:D

sherenetms
07-04-2006, 04:44 PM
WOW!! Nice one, iladys. Really nice!! Wish i can write as well as u do.

Sanzora
07-05-2006, 11:53 AM
Awesome imagery ;) I really like the feel of it... Cold yet elating if that makes any sense! Lol. Really stunning poem