Rejection....my address

[emmasu]

Am a girl who had to face the sadness
Too early to carry that burden and be the sourness
Hands are pointing, is something that no one can take
Rejection, is a hard word that can break


For me, rejection is the first word in my dictionary
It’s the first thing I learn in my sanitary
It was my first lesson in my kinder garden
Rejection, to my ears, it has a special tone

Mom, dad, said bye, without good
A second dad, said nothing but be in the road
Those were the only one
Those, have their own fun

Staring from my window, I see darkness
The night is decorated with stars, can I get my happiness
Can I be one of the stars?
Can I be some thing else, except not to be only a bar

Bar, block, nothing, that is my position in life
Can not it be more funny that it is really a lie
By the end of writing this poem, am dead
I wish I could be dead, dead, dead ,dead

Keep saying in my head, in the class, even in the bath
Can I make this wish come true and be in its path

Am waiting to be left again
To be rejected again
I was told, I will be talked to
But am waiting, just to be rejected

[BeeCrest]

Pretty good emmasu. Dark, but nice.
Hmm, I still have writers block =D

[emmasu]

Pretty good emmasu. Dark, but nice.
Hmm, I still have writers block =D
thanx bee, it supposed to be dark
i posted only for the sake of posting and not for the comments, but thanx for your comments

[Sanzora]

Iterresting... I'm trying to think of another word other than 'Dark' so as not to sound too much like BeeCrest, but that's the best word for it, dark. And powerful. It truely speaks something to me...

[Lolable]

lol yeah i agree with both BC and sanzy
but keep it up :D

[jacin]

it is quite fervid.
you dont have to rhyme.
often, forcing lines to rhyme hinders more than helps.
sometimes symetry is a better method than rhyme for rhythm.
dont get caught in mechanics, though, thats never a good thing.

[emmasu]

it is quite fervid.
you dont have to rhyme.
often, forcing lines to rhyme hinders more than helps.
sometimes symetry is a better method than rhyme for rhythm.
dont get caught in mechanics, though, thats never a good thing.
like i said, all of these things did not matter at the moment, but thanx for the advices, i only wanted to write how do i feel

[jacin]

like i said, all of these things did not matter at the moment, but thanx for the advices, i only wanted to write how do i feel
i understand.
and that is the most important way.