butterflies and lovers

[sto67]

something i wrote from a little prompt my friend gave me. fixed structure of 5-7-7 syllables in each stanza. enjoy =]
if you like it there is more of my poetry in the link in my sig =]

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there is no reason
for butterflies to flutter
and fail to bring you a smile-

there is no reason
for lovers to start hating
each other in showing love.

[layla]

wow... i love how profound this is, so much truth between the lines... beautiful work!

keep writing~!

[iladys]

Loveliness - It's short but has a lot of meaning. Nice job! Shall go and check out your other work ^_^

[Allicat]

aww this is really cute i like it, there is alot of meaning and its really simple but it makes you think and feel about what those words mean to you. keep on writing cuz its good ^.^ yay good job!

[Sanzora]

Really deep... So much said with so few words. Amazing ;)

[unwaken]

This is going to be one of the rare times I actually comment on poems but I looked through your work in deviantart. You're very good at what you do. I particularly liked your poem "Dance with Me".

That's one of your best work right there =)

There's good use of imagery and alliteration. Punctuation and structure are flawless too. The words are almost dancing in front of my eyes but surprisingly I still can find flow within the poem. I also like the way you let your sentences run on to the next time, it reminds me of a certain poet I like. :)

Oh! It's also nice to see that you're receptive to comments and critiques from others =) Keep up the good work. :p I'll most probably add your link to my favourites xD

[sto67]

thank you everybody for your kind words =]