Drift Away

[Lenne]

Drift Away

When eyes become
blind to the light.
A moment of regret,
I think,
began with unspoken words.

So even though, I can try;
Wanting to turn back again,
But drawn in by the currents
I soon lose hold of your hand.

Drifting away upon those waves,
I can no longer find the horizon.
Your smile, now so far away,
Fades into mist beyond those skies

Upon those diverging ripples,
that were once our memories.

[Isis]

Shiz, that was a good poem. Some powerful imagery takes hold. Nicely done.

[Lenne]

thanx iladys, but my style is slipping awayXD havent wrote anything for 2 months ;-;

[emmasu]

hey shizori, i may sound that am against myself (conflicting), but this really good cuz it seems that you are expressing your feelings at that moment and the reader can feel the pain that you are going through
i really felt that,
do not think about the rhythm or anything, as long as it express your feelings

[Icestorm]

i really i liked this one, it had very good imagery as iladys said and it hand some sadness in it that was reflected in the image of the tide. but as much as a current goes out to sea, it returns to bring new life