Raw.. The Falling Moment

[Icestorm]

This is maybe a weird poem i have no idea why i wrote it.. its certaintly a different style to my usual paced out style.. all i can think of to describe it as, is raw.. in every sense it captured my thoughts in rapid bursts.



Falling...
the feeling you get
when your world is ripped from beneath you
spiral is all you do.. the insanity reaches your mind

dont talk to me, im falling
dont put out your hand, its my pain
forget me im gone
ill see you at the bottom

but despite my cries
i feel that presence
your here? why did you..
you came? i said...

nothing matters you were lost
in the swirling darkness at the top
again i feel you
is it me? are you there..
am i forgotten? truely..

a sharp tug takes me out of that spiral
It is you.. you came
but why? i have nothing..
Your look says it all

Again im falling
but this time its not into the darkness
this time i fall into your eyes
i fall into you

raw emotions saved me
you came for me
when i had nothing for you
dont let me fall again..

[Evenstar]

Very Nice...though it's not from your usual type of poem writing...very unique in a way...keep it up ice! ^_^

[Lenne]

hmmm, profound and relates to so many things. but to me, maybe not something you intended^^ good work, keep it up!

[Isis]

It was not your usual style but it still got to me. It brings many different thoughts and imagery to my head. Even if it was raw, you put your emotions into it and the outcome was wonderful. Great job,Ice.