The green sin...

[Rising Phoenix]

The green sin...

And thus the broken chappel sang.
But words of God were not heard.
Just the earth singing
The heart beating under theyr wings.

And a flame fell from heaven to hell.
For hell there’s not it whispered.
For heaven there’s not it shouted.
Only ones will and love it said.

The green sin...

And the angels and demons sang.
And laughed and loved under the leaves.
A faerie spark and a public gun.
All mixed together.

All was forgotten and all was gone.
The night was bright above.
The wings were black and white.
Hate was not to be seen alongside sin.

For sin there’s not.
To love or to lust.
To gain or to greed.
All are the same in the green eyes...

R.P.

[yumisan]

ehh...nice one R.P....but some phrase i can't seems to understand with the 'not' like in the second stanza because as you know i'm kinda dumb in reading texts or anything.:D

[Helikaon]

very well done. It flows excellently! and made a distinct impression. well done.

[opticlink]

Interesting. Has a nice rythem to me.

[7D$]

hmmm altho i know 7 deadly sins i didnt knew the green one XD j/k j/k

nice poet although i didnt understadn some part but its good nice job and keep it up

[iladys]

Hey R.P interesting piece right there. I sorta understand the concept behind it but it'd help us all if you told us your influence or what you were trying to accomplish with it. Great poem as per usual :winking56

[Rising Phoenix]

Thanks guyz.

Well to tell you the truth this is one of my stranger creations partly because it was written by instict and partly because it was a 'flare of the moment' thing.

Here's a rough explanation:


"But words of God were not heard.
Just the earth singing"

This means that the participants were under the influence of earth/nature. So there were no divine laws prohibiting/dictating/saying anything. Religion was one of the first ways to control people.

"And a flame fell from heaven to hell."
(The flame sais the next three sentences.)
"'For hell there’s not' it whispered.
'For heaven there’s not' it shouted.
'Only ones will and love' it said."

You could say that the flame represents one's soul and the next 3 sentences mean that one will act regardless of heaven or hell ,the only guiding forces beeing ones will and love

"The green sin..."

This could be intrepted as the primal instinct. The will to act without having anything bar the way. Animals and plants acts like that so behaving like an animal could be 'a green sin'

"And the angels and demons sang.
And laughed and loved under the leaves.
A faerie spark and a public gun.
All mixed together."

"And the angels and demons sang."These represent good and bad deeds.

"And laughed and loved under the leaves."This could represent that we will love without knowing until the leaves are blown away...

"A faerie spark and a public gun." Society tends to not accepted anything that's old/different/new or just plain strange. This could also be translated that ones dreams/actions/anything will be shot by the public in order to control that individual

"All mixed together." Society is a mixture of both bad and good. We probably can't pull the 2 apart no matter how hard we try. It's also a struggle between individual wills and the general will that control us. This struggle can't be normarly observed as we've been it since we were born.

"All was forgotten and all was gone.
The night was bright above.
The wings were black and white.
Hate was not to be seen alongside sin."

"All was forgotten and all was gone" The 'party' the angels and demons held together caused all 'law' barriers to fall.

"The night was bright above." A reminder that the angels and demons are under the influence of nature

"The wings were black and white." Refers to the Angels and Demons. Freedom (wings) seems to be a quality of both good and evil. But here that dosen't seem to matter.

"Hate was not to be seen alongside sin." The angels and demons have forgotten that they are bitter enemies and having a festival together could be considered to be a sin.

"For sin there’s not.
To love or to lust.
To gain or to greed.
All are the same in the green eyes..."

'Green eyes'=nature, instinct. If we lived like animals we wouldn't know what sin is.

So yeah a preety mixed up poem about instict, moral, laws, ones action and control and how they don't exist in the natural world.

Hope I make sense and please remember that poems mean different things to different people.

Cheers

R.P.