Control

[summer_faerie]

Control

The villagers all stared in terror
What were they to do
The King had command it
So do it they must
Round up the boys
Gather the men
It is time to go to war

Fight for your country
Fight for your wives
Protect your King
Do it as I say

The villagers cowered in the dark
As the guards came and took their sons
Mothers cried for their babies lives
Sisters cried for their fathers long gone
Will they ever come back home
Will they live through this battle

Why must the men leave
While the Kings sits on his throne
Why must our sons die
While the King eats his grapes
This tyranny must end
The kind must come down

So gather up the forces
And stop this war
It is time to fight for our rights
Time to take a stand
The king must come down
So fight him we will

With all the might we have
With all the fight that is left
Protect those who you love
And remember what we fight for
Your family, your rights
The freedom to do as you wish
The freedom to say what you wish
We fight to gain
Liberty

I haven't postd anything here for awhile, but heres a newer poem I wrote alittle while ago. Tell me what you guys think, it is a little bit of a different style for me. .... -_-" *sighs* I tried to make it work. oh well let me know what you think!

[Kenken]

wow sis, that's quite nice ^^, keep it up!

[summer_faerie]

You thin kso Ken? I'm not to sure.... I'm not use ot writng a story type idea.. Not that it really is story like. But thats ok. Thankyou for the coment.

[Sanzora]

It's nice but I can see it's not your usual style ^_^

[Helikaon]

hehe i remember that u sent this to me to help out, its very nice and i was wondering why u hadnt posted it sooner

[summer_faerie]

heh I was working on it alittle bit. That and you never replyed -_-" ... brat. But what do you thin in the end Ice? Does it work or does it seem alittle off...

[maximoose666]

I like the feel of this, some of it sounds almost like a marching song. I'm wondering where you got the concept from, it's interesting :)

[yumisan]

yea..it's good and it seems like a song for the people who goes to war.a fasinating one.

[Helikaon]

no i did remember.. i said that it was good how it was, and gave u some little tips.. its still good :D

[iladys]

I love this poem. It starts of all sad and touching because they're off to war, then turns a different leaf when they want to go against the king. Great job!

[saycheese]

alrite poem, theme is stupid though.