Conclusions

[layla]

So they said often before
(is he worth waiting for)
I've tried again and again
but
to no avail.

Sunsets, moonlight dreams
They fade, gentle with style
Until
I finally realize you never will.
So in conclusion:
f o r g e t i n g you.

Bringing to me more tears,
in dreams i wonder of happiness.
Instead, heartbreak in time,
but thats the way it is.

Breaking dawn, fading night
Minutes pass, alone in thought
in conclusion:
You n e v e r cared (in that way)

my love never meant a thing...

July 28, 2006

[iladys]

Shizzy! *hugs* I love that poem ^_^ I like the simpleness and I see you're trying out the same format as a poem you did previously, and I think you've done well with this one :biggrinlo

[layla]

thanks, not too good in my own opinion, it'll probably not sit well with some other ppl>.> oh well

[saycheese]

appart from the second brackets, its pretty good actually.

edit: its good in a sense that, not only does it sounds like a poem, it actually does bring out feelings rather than just plain descriptive words that gets nowhere and sound really corny.

[Helikaon]

this is a very good poem, it brings forth the feelings that comes with the loss of love. the heart break and the fading into nothingness

[emmasu]

well, i do not know if its really apoem in your opinion, but its more like you are writing something about your feelings and it seems that you were writing without realizing that,
but anyway what that matters anyway as long as you are happy with it, i mean that as long as its good to you, it wll be good:rolleye09