For My Daughter

[Ruk]

Ok go easy on me, I so often write only for myself. But I thought if I would share this.

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For My Daughter.

Standing on the precipice
one foot already over the brink of oblivion
Thoughts of regret and feelings of remorse

Forgive me I seem to have forgotten my manners
Journeys are to begin at the end not the middle

I had seen it once not so long ago
Like a fleeting daydream I had held it
Like trying to grasp the rain as it fell
Then it was gone

Hope some people seem to see it as ubiquitous
Are they right
Or is it something much more then that

Moving on trying to reconnect to the world
the technological monstrosity that now calls it self society
did I do the right thing

Virtual worlds lead to virtual Hope
Virtual hope leads to virtually nowhere

I moved on but I always wondered

Standing on the precipice
one foot already over the brink of oblivion
Thoughts of regret and feelings of remorse

Then with out warning I saw it again
I reached out towards it and wrapped my life in it
A new light has come into the world
A light that I can help guide
A light that will be my grounding force
A light to love
A light named Willow

[maximoose666]

Is your daughter named Willow? I like the imagery and the language of this poem very much, as well as the ideas. I have to admit, however, that I find the poem difficult to understand except for the final stanza.

[Ruk]

Yes Willow is my daughters name, she is the light that guides my way these days.

I understand how you can have a hard time understanding the poem. And I will explain it better after / if I get some more CnC.

For now I think it's good just to have this out here, was a big step for me to share it.

[Icestorm]

this is a great poem, it gives this sort of disconnected feeling throughout it, like your wandering in this rift in time, not going forward not going backwards, finding lifes contraptions and society too much to take, yet it shines this light of hope at the end. very nicely written. hope to see more of your poems.

[evil-overlord]

very nice................... hope she liked it