don't misunderstand

[sto67]

don't misunderstand me
when i say you have pretty eyes,
and lips to die for,
since i value my life.

i didn't buy you a drink
to unlock your chastity (or lack thereof).
tell me something i dont know
besides the fact you're easy-
going.

i hope your eyes don't deceive you,
when you see streetsigns on the way to me;
i am not the "princess' highway"
on which you cruise along.

you were stumbling onto the road,
don't misunderstand;
i was pulling you away from the speeding car,
not towards me.

i hold more than your number in my hand,
don't misunderstand
when i bring you flowers and chocolates
and you forget my name.

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enjoy =]

[Helikaon]

i love the way you space out the words, giving that final sort of ring.. the whole concept is great man, i loved it.

[MasterWordSmith]

Nice poem, says something simple and clear in a short amount of time. For the most part the style you convey seems spot on and thats something that really atributes to your experiance as a writer, well done. A few general notes of improvement.

Your poem is extremely difficult to read. Not because of your sentace structure or because of your word choice, it's because of your punctuation. Capitialization and puntuation would work wonders for this piece. You do a goob job with periods, considering every stanza is one sentace, but the interal punctuation (specifically the letter "I" needs to be capitalized every time) could use some work.
don't misunderstand me
when i say you have pretty eyes,
and lips to die for,
since i value my life.
The wording is absolutely beautiful here, but the flow seems somewhat broken. Perhaps the removeal of the comma after line two, and a semi-colon insted of a comma after line 3 would read clearer and more consise.
i didn't buy you a drink
to unlock your chastity (or lack thereof).
tell me something i dont know
besides the fact you're easy-
going.
The words "lack thereof" are possibly the most over-used words to describe uncertanty in a statement. I feel especially when you have such an obvious flow, adding the parenthesis and the added on statement of uncertanty really break what this poem has going for it, and is just cluttering up an already perfect line. Maybe try to describe some form of uncertanty within the writers tone?
i hope your eyes don't deceive you,
when you see streetsigns on the way to me;
i am not the "princess' highway"
on which you cruise along.
The comma after line one is redundant, we know there is going to be a line break here. Maybe the replacement of "the" in the 3rd line with the word "your" will give a more personal feel to what you are trying to convey. Using "the" seems unatural, not what the narrator would actually say. It seems that the quotations around "princess highway" are supposed to describe a discust for the term, or an emphasis on hate. Perhaps if you used Italics it would streamline the concept and still give emphasis to it.
you were stumbling onto the road,
don't misunderstand;
i was pulling you away from the speeding car,
not towards me.
It's almost like a ryhme is perfect for this situation. I like the tone you are speaking in here, and think it's pronounced, but it is clunky verbally throughout. Wording it like this may help. "I pulled you from the speeding car,
not towards me." That way it streamlines the moment.
i hold more than your number in my hand,
don't misunderstand
when i bring you flowers and chocolates
and you forget my name.
I think the comma in line1 should be a period and there should be the word "so" before "don't misunderstand" in Line two.
enjoy =]
I did very much! ^^

[sto67]

cheers for the crit =]
much appreciated!
glad you both liked it too :D

[iladys]

Hey Sto. I've commented on this poem before, on DA. Anyway, it was one of my favourite poems ^_^ Hope to see some more of your works soon :)