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evil-overlord
08-12-2006, 03:41 AM
I never thought I would see the day,
people changing from their old ways.
Always worrying about how they look,
they walk through the streets, never realizing what you took.

You came around, and took the treasure you found,
causing society to come crashing down.
You didnt look back, always proud about what you have done,
thinking that you truly won.

Look no more, for the world will be avenged, leaving you alone,
forced for all your sins to atone.
Its all your fault, you know that well,
Its not my job for me to tell.

One day you will return,
not until this you did truly earn,
a withered man, a forgotten beast,
but on you we will feast.

Lost in the world, forgotten by all,
at one time you did stand tall.
Never again, it will never be,
that you will be able to get away for destroying me. :redbiggri

emmasu
08-12-2006, 07:35 AM
wow, another amazing peom, good job

evil-overlord
08-12-2006, 07:58 AM
thnx :D :D

Isis
08-12-2006, 04:46 PM
Interesting one here :) Its a good poem, keep it up!

MasterWordSmith
08-12-2006, 05:42 PM
My comments towards you other poem basically apply here. The poems are very (or rather exactly) similar in the way and style they are written, and are very consistant with eachother. I still recommend grammar//punctuation changes in order streamline the peace and make it easier to read. Try writing a poem without rhyming and see if it feels more natural.

evil-overlord
08-13-2006, 02:17 AM
will do :)