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In an abandoned room filled with darkness…
She slowly opens her eyes.
“Where… am I?”
A ray of light suddenly appears before her.
“I feel cold… why am I here? Why are there chains in my hand? Where are my clothes?
She tries to free herself from the locked chains.
“Somebody… answer me?!”
After a few minutes voice replied her question.
“Don’t you remember? My dear, Akane?”
The voice can only be heard through the speakers attached to the wall.
“Who are you? Show yourself?”
She continued.
“Why are you doing this?”
The only door to the room opens. The figure of a man can only be seen.
“Please… help me.”
He slowly approaches the helpless girl.
“My dear, you are so precious… young… and innocent.”
The face of the man can clearly be seen; he looked disfigured and ugly.
“Why… are you doing this?”
The girl felt scared when the man slowly ran his fingers through her chest.
“You are nothing but a filthy experiment of mine, Akane.”
The man grabs the neck of the girl and licks her flawless white cheek.
“Relax, I don't bite my experiments... I slowly kill them.”
"NOOOoooo!!!"
The girl tried to fight back as the man forcefully let the girl lay down.
To be continued...
SHiKaMaRi
09-13-2006, 12:13 PM
o_o Scary, scary. But now.. I want MORE... >.<
It's very interesting and exciting.. It's those kind of stories where you can't stop reading it. =] Write more, write more..
Baby-Pie
09-13-2006, 12:30 PM
OMFG dats good i wana no wat happns next .....keep writing loly
i have a feeling that the girl will somehow hurt the guy and escape and then hel hunt her...wow cant wait to read more...experiments huh..his charecter and cruelty remind me of mayuri
Evanesque
09-13-2006, 02:17 PM
OoO..very interesting...write more! I wonder what's going to happen next...yeah *ririn* the guy does seem similar to Mayuri taicho
Thanks! I never thought that people read this kind of stuff, but now the pressure's on me, lol ;) don't worry.... i'll try my best to make it even more surprising and exciting :)
And in that darkest moment of Akane's life... she suddenly lost the will to fight back.
"Please... stop! You’re... hurting me..."
Her tears continue to fall from her cheek but the madman continues to take away her innocence. She didn’t struggle any longer; she has lost all hope.
“When you’re done… please leave me be.”
Akane’s body froze, she gazed amidst that unforgettable incident, trying to replace them with happy thoughts, but to no avail, there was none. But a voice called her name... a memory flashed before her very eyes.
“Akane… Akane… what are you doing there? You’ll get sick under the rain.”
A young man about her age covered her with an umbrella.
“It’s my mother… he took her away. I need to go to her… she needs me.”
Akane tried to free herself from the young man who is holding her arms.
“Please, Shiro. Let me get my mother back… he’s taking her away…”
She tried to brake free from Shiro, but he wouldn’t let her go. He then hugged her.
“Akane… your mother is probably dead. She's been missing for three months now. Please, stop fooling yourself…"
“Noo… she’s alive… I know she is, Shiro… believe me. I know.”
She hugged him tightly as she continued to cry in his shoulders.
And in that moment, Akane woke from that memory. She was then alone in that dark and quiet room, her body felt weak; blood is scattered on the floor.
“Mother… I’m sorry…”
Akane then remembered the very reason why she is laying in that room.
To Be Continued…
Baby-Pie
09-13-2006, 08:40 PM
wow....this is getting better... i wonder who she is and whos the man that took her mom...and who the mad sicentist is??? uurrgghh too many questions*gets impatient* u gotta rite more hehe...
Wow very well done it`s gat power to it too!
Akane noticed that the chains were now unlocked. She then forced her body to stand up but the stitches in her stomach where hurting; blood slowly pours out.
“What have you done to me?”
Akane shrieked to the sight of several stitches around her body and the sight of her thumb and two toes cut-off.
“Aaahhhhhhhhhh!!!! WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS?!”
She demanded an answer; she needed to know what was going on.
“Akane… haven’t you heard the news lately... A MADMAN IS ON THE LOOSE, VICTIMS ARE ALL GIRLS WITH BODY PARTS AND ORGANS CUT-OFF?!”
The man’s voice can be heard through the speakers, he was laughing madly at the sound of his words.
“You were an easy catch, Akane. You are nothing more but one of my victims, nothing special… although you do resemble one of my favorites, you remind me of… Sayuri.”
Akane froze to the sound of that name… the name of her mother.
“Mother! What have you done to her?! WHERE IS MY MOTHER?! WHERE IS SAYURI?!”
She fought the pain of her bruised body as she shouted the name of her mother.
“I thought you’d never bring up the name of your lovely Mother, dear. She is one of my prized trophies, her skin as flawless as yours… she also acquires the body of a goddess. I wouldn’t dare cut her up to pieces, externally… I just sold the insides of her precious body. It has cost me a fortune, same with my other victims.”
Akane began to loose control and screamed as loud as she could, she hit her body hard on the door continuously so that it could open; she forced it to open, but failed.
“NOOOOOOOO!!! YOU BASTARD!!! LET ME OUT!!! I NEED TO SAVE MY MOTHER!!!”
She could not forgot those happy memories she had with her mother, she remembers the day when she got her first bike, the day when her mother bought her a red dress, all those happy memories until a flash of images in the newspaper where she found out her mother was missing appeared.
“Mama? noooooo!!!”
Akane then heard a strange sound, she saw red lights blinking. The door opens and saw two figures of men in white uniforms, and then they both grabbed her by the arm. Who are these men? What did they want with Akane?
To Be Continued…
Baby-Pie
09-14-2006, 12:01 PM
ooohhh damn you cant stop there...its getting even more interesting...i feel bad for the girl..stiched up body with missing organs uuhh gross...good job so far...u get a huggy*hugs* hehe but keep writing...i cant wait to read more...
I'll give you a hint on what happens next, but dont worry i'll be posting the next one later today...
Hint: You will come to understand who Akane really is and why she's in that room.
Baby-Pie
09-14-2006, 12:15 PM
ohh thats great news man...now you got me sitting on the edge of my seat loly *blushes* neway you carry on and keep writing...il be waiting to read more...
Evanesque
09-14-2006, 12:52 PM
*gasps* Iro-kun, you're amazing! I admire what you've written so far, you're very talented *gives you a cookie*
Please do continue writing...keep it up *rock lee style thumbs up+shiny grin*
Akane struggles to free herself from the men holding her arms.
“She’s gone psycho again! Inform Doctor Yamamoto, immediately!”
The man ordered the other to call the doctor and he rushed out of the room.
“Who are you? What doctor? Let me go! My mother’s in danger! He’s going to kill her!”
She continues to struggle from the man holding grip of her and then she kicks his left foot. She ran out of the room and was shocked of what she saw; there was room after room in that white hall, and the only way leading out was through that narrow path with the sign “EXIT”.
Akane ran and ran as fast as she could until she saw a woman standing before her.
“Where are you going, Akane?”
Akane somehow remembers that stern look on that lady’s face.
“I know you… you’re that doctor! But how…?”
She tries to recall the events where she have met that doctor.
“You are so forgetful, Akane. I am your doctor… Doctor Yamamoto.”
Akane felt confused. In her mind she thought she was seeing things. Her surroundings fell pitch black, in front of her now was the disfigured man she feared of.
“YOU AGAIN! STAY AWAY FROM ME!!!”
She tried to run from that man in front of her but she couldn’t move; she was immobile from that moment on. She saw that disfigured man slowly beating up her mother.
“PLLLEASSEE DONTT HURT HER!!!”
The stitches in her body began to bleed; she is slowly being covered in blood. She stood still, watching that man kill her mother slowly. Akane, felt helpless again… she couldn’t save her mother from the man she feared, that man... is her father.
To Be Continued…
Baby-Pie
09-14-2006, 08:22 PM
OMG im shocked beyond words...whys her father beating her mother and why does she see the madmans face when she looks at her doctor....it sounds as if shes dreaming in her dream...*looks very confused*
hey Iro-kun u always say To be continued n now u said To be concluded....i dont want you to stop hehe ur tooooo goooood....u really have an amazing brain loly *messes up Iro-kuns hair*....hope you leave us amazingly speechless in the end...
thanks for the support *ririn* i actually plan to make ESCAPE a collection of dark and absrtact stories... like the first one is entitled "Nightmares from the past"
nyway, i'll try to give ya all a speechless ending.... and thanks for supporting ESCAPE :)
Baby-Pie
09-15-2006, 03:28 PM
hey dont thank me...i shud thank you hehe bcuz of you id wake up in the morning and be like I HAVE TO GO AND CHECK WHAT IRO-KUN WROTE NEXT...hehe it is very well written in my opinion...you have my support all the way..
i actually plan to make ESCAPE a collection of dark and absrtact stories... like the first one is entitled "Nightmares from the past"
well that sounds like a good idea too..so go ahead and hope you succeed...but hey im dying to know what happns next and i just know that your gona make me go speechless hehe so do your stuff!! *huggyyy*
The next morning…
Akane woke up from what she thought was just another nightmare. She noticed that her surroundings where different from the dark and filthy room. But the odd thing she noticed was that she was wearing a strait-jacket.
“Huh? What is this? Why am I wearing this?!”
She tried to free herself from the tight clutches of the uncomfortable garment. Akane then remembers the chains locked to her hands before. She starts to twitch her head; she was starting to see things again.
Meanwhile, outside Akane’s room…
“Last night was her worst outbreak. Our nurses had to tranquilize her to stop her from screaming and hurting herself. I fear that she won’t be able to recover completely.”
Doctor Yamamoto was talking to the young man Akane knew, it was Shiro.
“Doctor, Akane is having a hard time. Her mother went missing three years now and the whereabouts are still unknown… I assumed her to be dead but Akane insists that her mother is a victim of a madman who sells his victim’s organs in the underground market.”
Shiro paused then continued.
“She also suffered abused under the hands of her father... he died recently and the police suspects that Akane has something do with his death.”
Shiro fell into complete silence. Doctor Yamamoto noticed that Shiro had a scar on his face.
“Did Akane… give you that scar?”
Shiro felt uneasy to the question that was brought up.
“Yes. It happened a few weeks ago, before I decided to admit her here in the asylum. That night she started acting differently, she thought I was her father… she hit me hard on the face that left me this scar, and the next morning she didn’t remember anything that had happened. Doctor there must be another way to help her…”
Shiro felt sad for the friend he once knew and possibly loved.
“You are a good friend, Shiro. You were there for her during her worst and darkest moments… please, never lose faith and don’t ever give up on her.”
Doctor Yamamoto patted Shiro’s shoulders.
“She can get better, Shiro… once she escapes the nightmares from her past.”
Doctor Yamamoto and Shiro heard a loud scream from Akane’s room. They both rushed towards the room and saw the nurse crying. They saw Akane lying on the floor, her forehead starts to bleed with the open-bruise she have from hitting her head on the wall. Shiro immediately carried Akane's body and ran her to the emergency room. Is Akane dead? It is up for you to conclude.
Narration by Shiro:
"We oftentimes wonder why the nightmares from the past come to haunt us. Maybe its because we could not accept a certain incident that have happened. We fear that others might think bad against us. We also feel scared to be alone in this world. We try to fight back,to fit in but why is that it overpowers us? Akane tried to free herslef from her misery, but she was clouded with the saddest and darkest scenarios possible. She lost her mother who was very close to her, she got mistreated and abused by her father, she felt alone and scared which even caused her to hurt and loose herself...
But despite everything that had happened, my friend Akane have found a happier and peacful place together with her long lost mother..."
- End -
Baby-Pie
09-16-2006, 12:51 PM
Iro-kun.....that was beautiful...i truely am speechless and amazed and deeply touched...so she doesnt survive...wise words in the ending does make a person think...good job in this story hope you keep writing many more interesting stories...Good luck!! :)
Hey for those who didnt get who was narrating... it was Shiro! sorry for the misunderstanding but akane is not my friend in real life she is a fictional character that i created for the story escape :)
thanks for all the support and i hope you continue to read my other stories!
Evanesque
09-17-2006, 07:03 AM
Your story was amazing!...Here's a cookie *gives Iro-kun a cookie*
*takes cookie*
thanks Evanesque! glad you liked the story :)
Evanesque
09-17-2006, 11:23 AM
Liked it? I love it!! Here's another cookie! *cookie*
You should continue writing...like i said before, you're very talented!
Keep up the good work.
*gladly accepts cookie*
im really grateful that you loved it :) i am really inspired to write more interesting stories. thanks for the support!
*gives rep for the support*
Decado
09-17-2006, 12:50 PM
wow...been reading ur story Iro-kun...gotta hand it to ya...ur pretty damn good.
its freaky at the start man...!
thanks arran! at the start i wanted to show you guys a very demented and dark clouded mind of akane. it is a representation of her saddness, guilt, pain and angst. Everything she feared of, even her nightmares became a reality to her :)
The Escape Chronicles
presents
Fade
Case File No. 43: Elizabeth Stevens
Mrs. Stevens slowly awakes from her peaceful sleep and sits up straight from the hospital bed. A nurse enters the room and greets this old lady.
“Good morning, Mrs. Stevens. Please lay back, you need more rest.” The old lady suddenly grabs the nurse’s arm.
“Is he here? My son, Jeremy. He promised he’d visit…” Mrs. Stevens asked her but the nurse shook her head.
“I’m sorry mam.” The nurse gave Mrs. Stevens a look of sadness in her face. It has been nearly six months since a visitor had arrived for the old lady, the nurse thought.
“I’ll come back to check up on you, Mrs. Stevens. In the mean time please rest…” The nurse left the room.
Mrs. Stevens is diagnosed with terminal cancer and has a few months to live. The last visitor she had was her only son, Jeremy. Everyday she would ask the nurse if her son have arrived but the same response was given to her, “No”. Mrs. Stevens still, has never lost hope and prayed that her son will visit her one day.
She rested her back on the pillow behind her and stared at the white ceiling. She then closes her eyes and remembers the happiest memories she had when she was with her husband. Mr. Stevens was murdered two years ago and the only person she has is Jeremy.
A few months later, Mrs. Stevens grew weak but she never fails to ask the nurse about her son’s arrival. One day, Jeremy visits the hospital unexpectedly. He looked more a lot like his mother, soft brown hair and green eyes although he looked pale and ghastly.
“Mom… wake up. It’s me Jeremy.” He wakes up his mother.
“Jeremy? Is that really you?” She begins to cry. Then she stretched her arms and hugged Jeremy.
“I thought… you’d never come. I missed you.” She continues to cry and he did the same too.
“I waited for you… I never lost hope. I prayed that you’d someday visit me here.” Mrs. Stevens wiped away the tears from her cheek and looked at Jeremy’s eyes. He remained calm and silent.
“I know we’ve had our differences but I want you to know that your father and I have always loved you…” She reveals the letter hidden under her pillow and gave it to Jeremy.
“Please open this when the time comes… remember that no matter what happens, I forgive you...” Mrs. Stevens spoke softly and closed her eyes. She knew what to expect from her son’s visit.
“I’m sorry, mom...” He grabbed the pillow from her bed and suffocated Mrs. Stevens. She chose not to fight back and easily died that day. Jeremy disappeared and his whereabouts are still unknown, he is a suspect for killing more than 40 people.
Baby-Pie
10-02-2006, 02:37 PM
wow you started another story here Iro...and its good...the kids a serial killer nice..so is this the end of it or should we be expecting more?? *passes cookie*
Kichi_Sama
10-02-2006, 04:44 PM
Woo Hoo! Prehaps I should start up my Studies again........
but I like it Iro-kun - some real flair in there....well done!
Case File No. 41: Jane Anderson
“Tell us, Jane. Where is he?” The man sitting in front of a 16 year old girl asked.
“I… can’t tell you.” Her head faces the ground as tears continue to fall from her cheek.
“You know you can trust us. We’re the police. You’re safe with us.” The man calmed his voice.
“No! If I tell you… he’ll kill me…” She fell into complete silence.
“He can’t! I promise you he won’t lay a finger on you anymore.”
Jane looks at the inspector with no hope of telling him her secret.
“I will never… you don’t know what he’s capable of.” She gave him a terrified look and continued to cry.
“How can you protect that man who harassed and raped you?! He also almost tried to kill you! Will you protect that man?! What if he continues to kill other people?” He shouted.
“I’ll tell you… if you promise to protect me with your life.” She said.
“Yes!”
“Give me your word!” Jane assured.
“Alright I promise, now tell me!”
At first she hesitated and looked from all sides of the confined room.
“He’s going to some hospital… somewhere in Lakevalley. I don’t know why… but that’s what I’ve heard. He threatened me that if I told the police he’ll kill my family. Please inspector, protect me from…”
In that moment the girls head exploded. The inspector was shocked. The medical team came in the next thing and gathered the remains of the girl. After a few hours of observation they’ve found that there was a microchip planted in her head. If the girl’s temperature rises it will explode immediately which probably triggered when the inspector forced the girl to reveal her secret.
“Damn that heartless monster! He wouldn’t even spare the life of an innocent girl!” The inspector looked more determine in finding the murdered of more than 40 people, Jeremy Stevens.
“Report this to the chief immediately! I think I know who he’s heading for next…”
Decado
10-07-2006, 09:07 AM
whoa man. u seem to be good at telling the story through a female, and that last part was well done.
keep it up bro ^^
i like how u did the second part first...u find out y she "forgives him"
Baby-Pie
10-08-2006, 04:19 PM
that was great Iro-kun..keep up the good work..waiting for the next chapter :)
Evanesque
10-16-2006, 10:54 AM
Iro-kun! You started another story! OMFG, I love your style of writing...plus it has some gore in there...awesome, dude!! The girl's head exploding, the shock when Jeremy suffocates his mom...*gives you truck loads of cookies*
I hope you don't get sick of teh cookies...*grin*
Keep writing...oh and thanks for the rep...
thanks for all your comments :) sorry but i wont be able to post new stories lately bcuz my comuter got wormd (virus) once it gets fixd (hopefully) i'll continue writing... thanks again!
Evanesque
10-17-2006, 09:54 AM
Oh no...f*** that worm...
*waits patiently for Iro-kun's next part*
The Escape Chronicles
presents
Mystery Letters
Letter from Eric:
I woke up in an old cellar. The room was very confined and filthy. I tried to open the steel door that leads out of the room but it was locked tight. Minutes later a man appeared from the shadows. I thought he was a ghost but I found out he was more of a monster. He attacked me like a crazy beast. He bit my right ear off and I fought back. He then revealed a dagger and continuously stabbed me. I was scared. I thought I died that day. Even until now I never knew how I got here… how did I survive?
Letter from Vana:
I read from the newspaper that a mysterious man was saved from some island thirteen days before. And seven days after he died… cause of death was still unknown but the police believe he died of a heart attack. They were wrong. I was with that man when he died. I will never forget that horrifying day for it was the devil that killed him. I can not sleep anymore. I’m very frightened. The devil knew I saw him… now, his after me. I pray that I could escape from this nightmare.
Letter from Ivan:
I heard some strange sounds coming from my neighbor’s apartment last night. And I didn’t even bother confronting her of the disturbing noise. I felt the chills running through my spine. The thrashing sound from the wall was very alarming, I was terrified to uncover the mysterious disturbance and instead I turned on my radio and set the volume to maximum. A few hours later the disturbing noise stopped. It was 3:00 a.m. I fell asleep shortly when the music from the radio ceased. I then had a horrifying dream. I was facing the most gruesome creature that took form from a human being. He tried to suck up the life from me but I fought back and escaped. I woke up at 6:00 a.m. My nose was bleeding… I then noticed the wounds on my wrist. What it meant… I don’t know.
Letter from Leah:
Our chief here in the station has given me weird cases of mysterious deaths. First was the sudden heart attack of the Englishman that died three months ago and the second case was the nurse who died because of suicide. My latest case is the missing youth who happens to be the nurse’s neighbor. I have tried to see the connection between these three people and the closest clue I got is the first letter of their names… which spelled out E – V – I… I’m guessing that the next victim’s name would start with an “L” to complete the word, evil. But I thought, what’s the connection? Maybe my minds been playing tricks on me. But when I came to investigate the crime scene of these different cases I had this feeling of intense atmosphere that somewhat drains my life-force. I do not believe in the supernatural or anything of the like but I have heard of stories where the devil is reborn. I would like to think that the mind is a dangerous playground for us all. Similar cases of people’s mental breakdown is the girl from the mental institute who have killed herself and the crazy madman on the loose that have murdered more than 40 people. I guess, there are many odd occurrences in this world probably not just by coincidence but I would like to believe that the connection between humans is intentionally designed to answer the biggest mystery of all...
*some parts of the letter is missing*
Decado
10-19-2006, 03:22 PM
lolz... nicely dine Iro. i really like it.
reminds me of the olden style horror films that are on the "classics" channel.
lolz... Ivan's letter was pretty freaky (the part bout the thrashing against the walls)
u captured it nicely ^^
The Assassin's Letter
The horrifying days of the past is back, and it continues to haunt me. The guilt I have long hidden away in the very depths of my existence is consuming me again. Those 40 people I have murdered are not at peace and I somehow know that they’d come back for revenge.
I have moved from city to city, trying to find myself again. Am I a bad person? I thought. Why do I continue to exist? Why does God not punish me for my sin?
I am a murderer, I kill for a living. I have tried to lock away my conscience but failed. Why do I kill? I ask myself several times. If only I can turn back time. I’d escape the painful memories that have stained my heart. The memoirs that have changed me to the man I am now, the assassin… with a conscience.
Evanesque
10-30-2006, 01:55 PM
*Gasp* more stuff from Iro-kun!!!
@eva: um... is that a good thing or a bad thing, lol ^_^
btw i post random stories here under escape chronicles... some are not related to each other whatsoever. Although the theme remains the same ;)
Baby-Pie
10-30-2006, 08:17 PM
gosh Iro-kun i din't notice this before..glad i found it..very interesting and i love the same part De does it truely gave me chills *shudders* anyways it was nice good job..:)
this the fesh stuff! keep it comeing!
Evanesque
10-31-2006, 12:42 PM
@eva: um... is that a good thing or a bad thing, lol ^_^
btw i post random stories here under escape chronicles... some are not related to each other whatsoever. Although the theme remains the same ;)
What do you think? Great, of course...Your stories seem to really get me engrossed...:lol
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