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deto
01-27-2007, 04:00 PM
(Clarification: since it is a fan story that takes places in the universe that
tolkien created, names and places can be the same)

CHAPTERS

CHAPTER 1: Mirdautas Vras (http://forums.bleachportal.net/showpost.php?p=1206778&postcount=1)
CHAPTER 2: The Forests Rebuke (http://forums.bleachportal.net/showpost.php?p=1213850&postcount=14)
CHAPTER 3: Too Far off Track (http://forums.bleachportal.net/showpost.php?p=1217653&postcount=18)
CHAPTER 4: Arise from Ashes (http://forums.bleachportal.net/showpost.php?p=1217653&postcount=25)
CHAPTER 5: Silent Company



*****CHAPTER 1 : MIRDAUTAS VRAS*****

The sun was again hanging low on the horizon, the world seemed to be covered
in dim red light. The stomping sound heard from afar had suddenly ceased. The
Black Horde was resting. They had been marching for three days straight, as if
driven by terror, they made their way southward towards the misty mountains.
The north was free once again after the battle of the five armies, but that
is another story.

three days they had a silent follower from which they knew nothing. No one
noticed him except the few elves of mirkwood which protected the northern
border of their realm. Even if the Goblins outnumbered them by many spears
and swords, they did not dare to enter the woods. Not since the dark Necromancer
has been defeated and was driven out of his stronghold Dol Guldur in the southern
part of Mirkwood. The Goblins of the mountains hated and despised the woodelves
with their keen eyes and swift arrows. The Black Horde tried to pass the road around
Mirkwood as fast and unnoticable as possible. It was then the third day after their
departing from the north when they reached the end of Mirkwood, here they could
rest, for they were all weary. Dol Guldur was abandoned but still no woodelves came
here. The giant spiders still lingered there and the elves had fierce battle with them.

The Night was drawing near and the Goblins lit several fires, cut down trees and
established a little camp. Not far away hidden in the shadows was a faint shilouette
that no evil eye could see. The Goblins grew more and more confident with the garthering
of darkness. They began to sing in their terrible black language, a sound as if a thousand
nails pierce your heart:

Brus-kuluz taurzur bûrzu tiil-ob
Hush-ob dhurum agh ufum dhurum
Tor Vautu brus-troguz
Urgai-u gukh dûmp agh tiimor

Talaan-u rûk-ir tor urûk
Nauru-ir agh kragoru nûrsu grishûrz
Nork-ulu furtun agh goth
ob bot-tuk

Ghaash agh akûl
Mirdautas vras!
Karn ghaamp agh nût
Shaut Manwe quiinubat gukh

The night was filled with their evil voices and evil laughter, every mortal man
would have run away by the sheer sound of it. But the shadow in the woods was
not moving, he knew what they sang about. he knew the black speech well, he had
heard too many goblins curse him in this langauge. They sang about orcs and wolves
that would bring the wrath of their kin among men, elves and dwarfs and about
today being a good day to kill.
While they were still singing and mocking about their enemies the shadow crept
slowly away from the woods, to risk an ear and to find out more about their plans.
He came ever closer to the camp, no one seemed to notice him. Almost, there were
patrols about, encircling the camp. Suddenly there was riot, the sound of many
feet could be heard. "Oi! Who goes there?", torches were brought and on the open
field there stood a little host of slanty eyed goblins. 'Let me pass you maggot!'
yelled the biggest one among them and pushed the guards aside. 'Hai! Oi! Grabash,
where are you!' out of a tent came a goblin with broad shoulders and a blood red
armor, 'What is this noise!? Who disturbs me, ha!?' This was Grabash, Chieftain
of the mountain Goblins. The other one was Azhag who escaped with a few of his
people from an attack lead by roaming dwarfs. Just a second before they were
noticed the shadow had moved on and had his cloak wrapped around him to remain
unseen. He could only hear a bit of what the Goblins spoke about, but it was
obvious that Azhag was angry, very angry, longing for revenge. The two Goblins
went into their tent. It went silent again, no voice could be heard, only faint
murmur among the Goblins that were guarding the camp. Most must have been asleep,
but what they didn't know, they had to move sooner than they wanted to.

Not much later Azhag and Grabash came out again and gathered the Goblins around them
and Azhag spoke in loud commanding voice: 'My brothers! the dwarfs are abroad and
killing our kin because of their greed for gold! They shall see what their greed will
bring!' Grabash removed his scimitars from the sheaths, held them into the air and asked:
'Oi! Ho! Who wants to cut dwarf throats?!' The crowd yelled and screamed. They were
preparing to leave, to kill the dwarfs that were after them. Only a little group of
Goblins remained at the camp. The bigger host with Azhag and Grabash left the camp as
soon as they were ready and they disappeared out of sight into the darkness.

The confidence of the Goblins in the camp lessened, for the loomy woods seemed to
be more terrifing now when they were only small in numbers.
What they didn't know then, they were right in their fear. In the night a sword was
drawn, glimmering in bright blue. The shadow leaped forward onto the Goblins around
the fireplace, bells were ringing, goblins were screaming. a group was storming out
their fiery faces were filled with terror and anger. "The biter!" they yelled, they
knew the sword, this misterious warrior was wielding. Orcrist it is known to many
but the Goblins call it biter. They hated this blade, the reason for thousands of
dead brothers. The shadow was cutting, hacking and slashing and ever brighter Orcrist
seemed to glow, as if the sword would lust for more Goblin necks. No matter how hard
they tried they could not harm the cloaked warrior, spears were scattered, shields
splintered. The evil laughter died one by one untill the camp grew silent, only the
flickering of the fire could be heard. The warrior cast back his Hood and turned his
gaze into the night. Behind him a Goblin sneaked closer to him, he leaped forward and
when he thought to bring the final stroke upon his enemy the elf drove around,
separating head from shoulders and make the Goblin head fly through the night, the
body fell before his feet and the earth was soaked with pitch black blood. The misterious
cloaked warrior that night was an elf of course. Only elves could bear to hear the black
speech without fleeing in terror, and only the elves had eyes keen enough to see through
the dark of the night. No Goblin escaped the camp or saw another morning, they were all
slain, their faces showed in what terror and dismay they were when they were cut down.

Orcrist found rest in his sheath and the elf was smiling and said to himself "Indeed
a good day to kill." He searched the camp but apart from some silver coins nothing
could be found. At least nothing useful for the elf, "Rather would i die of starvation
than eating orc food", he mocked and left the camp into the night.

Elves remember and honor this night still in one of their songs, roughly translated
it goes like:

a strong foul wind in the face
as i tighten my cape, quicken my pace
i alone the great white hunter, marching through the dust
for more blood now i lust

the sword in my hand, has ever since been my best friend
it will cut through flesh and bone till the very end
a dear companion day after day
slashing and hacking everything in it's way

another village in sight of the ever watchful gaze
going faster over the plains and the misty haze
hear the bell, for whom it might toll, i care not
the fire of revenge in my eyes is burning hot

the rage has been unleashed i cannot stop
everyone must bleed to the last drop
pitch black blood spilled upon grey stone
breaking and splittering the enemies bone

dodge the arrow, block the spear
my elven mind knows no fear
i stand my ground with strong will
it is a good day to kill

orcrist my sword, the biter how goblins call
with good reason, for it will bite them all
no escape from this slaughter
suddenly dies all the evil laughter

the blade obtained from the mountains of old
the memories among goblins still bold
they fear, they hate, they curse
wielded by a strong arm, what can be worse

the biter glows bright before their grimaces
and shines upon their lifeless carcasses
they run, they hide, they scream
as if trying to awake from a bad dream

stabbing and cursing me in the black speech
but no scimitar tip will ever reach
my attacks graceful and swift like a dance
but cold and deadly by any chance

continious charges till the last falls before my feet
the biter finally sinks in his sheath
i close my eyes, wipe away the blood dark as the night
i'm tired but this wasn't todays last fight

i repeat the oath i swore: to seek, to kill and never to yield
as i leave another forsaken battlefield
my path leads me to lands away so far
i the hunter, march again, march to war


(i still try to bring more details into that, hope i can do that with the
next chapter)

Lucki
01-28-2007, 01:11 PM
Thats bloody brilliant!!!! *screams agagagagagag...multi-talented hubby...is so proud..*kisses*...i know the tolkein family, i used to go to school with the writers great gran kids well either that or just gran kids lol

Evanesque
01-29-2007, 07:12 AM
Really xai? Wow that's nice.

@deto: awesome chappie...but why do I feel like you got the urge and inspiration to write it after we spoke something about LOTR and hobbits on msn?
Keep 'em coming
*huggles*

deto
01-29-2007, 07:19 AM
yeh i blame you :redbiggri well i had some ideas and wanted to
write some something bigger.

anyway chapter 2 will be released tonight. :)

Evanesque
01-29-2007, 08:09 AM
So yesh I am the bugger and root to your inspiration!
*Godly light behind Ev and harp music in the background*
XD

Ooh..can't wait to read it. Btw, I didn't know you had really awesome writing skills...
*cookies*

M-50
01-29-2007, 08:20 AM
Dude I love this! Keep on writing deto!

deto
01-29-2007, 08:26 AM
So yesh I am the bugger and root to your inspiration!
*Godly light behind Ev and harp music in the background*
XD

that made me laugh quite loud :redbiggri


Ooh..can't wait to read it. Btw, I didn't know you had really awesome writing skills...
*cookies*

ty *g* :winking56


edit: the title of CHAPTER 2 is "the forests rebuke"

Evanesque
01-29-2007, 08:33 AM
I'm sure it did...made it especially for you :redbiggri
XD

Forest rebuke YEAY!
*cookies*

Well how long do you plan to keep the chappies going? I'm sure it'll be hard to write all that especially when you're juggling work, everyday life, planning to come here and going around getting me gifties :redbiggri

deto
01-29-2007, 08:45 AM
I'm sure it did...made it especially for you :redbiggri
XD
Forest rebuke YEAY!
*cookies*
Well how long do you plan to keep the chappies going? I'm sure it'll be hard to write all that especially when you're juggling work, everyday life, planning to come here and going around getting me gifties :redbiggri

i feel so honored! no really :biggrinki

i was planning on going for like 10 chapters or so. they will be more detailed
or i want to make them more detailed. also maybe switching to other chars.
other stuff that happens.

the miracle of time :P there is not much more to plan for me, oh maybe what
to pack but thats about it :winking56 getting you gifties? theee..... scrape
away the "me" and it might be right. :redbiggri



eeedit: i added links to each chapter, it's also easier to read
since the tab stops might be weird on the different forum
styles.

Evanesque
01-29-2007, 10:33 AM
That's very thoughtful and smart of you to put in story links...it'll be easier to access your chappies without having to scroll through the pages.

So no gifties for me? >.>
*sniff*
*sulks*
Fine then I'm not going to take you out around even if Rin begs me and pays me (wouldn't mind the cash though...:redbiggri)

Hmmph...

deto
01-29-2007, 10:42 AM
That's very thoughtful and smart of you to put in story links...it'll be easier to access your chappies without having to scroll through the pages.

how much do you need? :redbiggri *talks to self* stop bein such a cynic deto *g*


So no gifties for me? >.>
*sniff*
*sulks*
Fine then I'm not going to take you out around even if Rin begs me and pays me (wouldn't mind the cash though...:redbiggri)
Hmmph...

oh stop! i can't see sad people! ok ok, but only if you help me in return
regarding gifties! you wouldn't take me to some sightseeing? *sobs*
makes me sad, sooooo saaad *sniffs*

Evanesque
01-29-2007, 10:56 AM
I think you're using reverse psychology, aren't you?
Fine, I'll make a list of the things I want and get me whichever is kidnappable or stealable...like a horsie...:redbiggri

OR I can just help you with ideas for some gifties :redbiggri <--*ish making it too obvious* No it's not for me...it's for...*suspense music*...
...My mom O_O

*expects deto to faint*
*hopes deto faints*
*wishes deto faints*
*just imagined deto fainting*
XD

About your chappies, I meant once everyone notices it and gets the urge to post a comment regarding the story, so the next chappies, even the second one, might get buried amongst those critics and cookies.

deto
01-29-2007, 11:15 AM
oh damn i thought it was easier... oh sure i'll bring you a horse, neatly packed
into tiny little vacuum bags :redbiggri going to be a nice dinner :P

yes thats a good ide....... your mom O_O oh i'm gonna use that remark
somewhere, sometimes... and i expect a pm with millions of ideas now.
ha! see what you've done!

*waits to faint*
*does not faint*
*pretends to faint*

it already is burried :P and i blame you once more
(now i'm using auto-suggestive-negative-influence,
which should make you post even more)

deto
01-29-2007, 06:20 PM
*****CHAPTER 2 : THE FORESTS REBUKE*****


The sun filled the valley below and was glimmering over the tree
tops. the world was silent, peaceful, no sound could be heard.
it was now five hours since the bigger host of the goblins turned
to make hunt for the dwarves that were after them.
The only thing they could find was a cold wind coming from the north
no sign of a dwarf, neither track nor bodies could be found, even though
Azhag assured that they killed some of the dwarfs that night. Grabash
grew impatient, his gaze was fixed on Azhag that was running up in front.
Suddenly the host of Grabash came to a halt. Azhag turned around 'Ha! Come,
faster! What are you standing there you maggots?' but Grabash held up his
hand and said 'We go no further! Not until we found a sign of a dwarf!'
Azhag was raging 'You coward!' he yelled and smashed his scimitar against
his round shield. Grabash clenched his fists around his dual scimitars
and answered 'You are the fool and to all that a LIAR! There are no dwarfs
here, i can tell hours later if dwarfs were here, you probably ran away
from a horde of wild boars!' this Azhag couldn't take, anger and rage
overcame him and he leaped forward, swinging his sword but Grabash was quick
he blocked the half hearted attempt with one of his swords and launched
a counter attack, he bore his other sword deep into his enemies stomach.
Azhag was spitting blood and tried again to bring a swing down on Grabash
but ere he could finish it his arm got separated from his body. The big goblin
in his blood red armor was roaring and laughed as Azhag fell back crying for
help. None of the goblins that were with Azhag dared to draw their weapons.
'Those of you who want to come with me are free to go, but i won't hunt
here for boars, not near this damned wood' spoke Grabash, turned and headed
back to where his camp was.
Everyone followed him, they were not even noticing their dead leader on the
ground. This is how it goes among them, the stronger is right, the weaker is
dead.

The sun was now high above their heads, they did not like the sun but they
didn't care for such things. Once again they were singing one of their songs,
this time in the common speech for they did not fear attackers on open
field if they were so huge in number.

heavy boot stomps upon the way
the light shall die today
the black horde marches on
till the battle is won

the world of men and elves shall fall
we ought kill them all
let no joyful voice be heard throughout the land
once it is in goblin hand

welcome to slavery my friends
your new life till it miserably ends
feel the whip, terror shall drive your mind
you maggot, you weakest of mankind

we hate the elves with eyes so keen
slaughter them wherever they can be seen
no mercy shall we know
no remorse will we show

The closer they got to their camp the uneasier they became, something wasn't right.
Everyone among them could feel it, the chant slowly died down. There was no smoke,
no fires, no noise, no answering call to their song. From afar the camp looked deserted
almost as they took off without the rest. Grabash was quickening his pace and run
towards the camp. The eyes of the Goblins filled with fear and wonder. All dead, their
brothers lay there, slaughtered. Grabash turned against the forest and cursed the elves
in his terrible speech. Examining the bodies closer he discovered that all of them
had been killed by a sword, not by bow or arrow, nor by magic. Still he was sure it was
the elves, only elves could be so unmercyful with their enemies. Several dead Goblins
were missing heads and other limbs. What he did not know that it was only a single elf
and he had not left much earlier.

Grabash commanded to empty the camp and to take everything with them. The bodies of
their brothers were piled and they lit a fire that was burning till deep in the night.
The thick black smoke could be seen far accross the land and even the elf noticed. So
they found their carcasses he thought and a grin was on his face, but he also knew
that they were near, too near. The dead of their commrades did not keep them off track
for long, he must hurry now to reach a safe spot out of their sight. With that in mind
he fastened his cape and took off.

The black host was pushing now, ever southward they were marching with a greater speed
than before. Some of them were still struck with fear, expecting a horde of angry dwarves
jumping on them or even worse a battalion of elves. But in the lands they came there were
only few elves, for they were avoiding the cursed woods of lothlorien and the mines of
moria deep under the mountain. they were going slightly to the east. A rather unknown and
wild land.

The elf who was just few leagues in front of them took another road, the last homely house
was his destination. The house of Elrond in Rivendell, there he would find peace even if it
was just to heal his war-torn body and to ease his troubeled mind. It was still a forthnight
till he would reach the doorstep. Night was covering the land and both partys were marching
without even thinking about taking a short rest.

Lucki
01-29-2007, 06:32 PM
:O...eeeee....awwwh all their brothers are dead :O...*applauds*....eeeee cant wait till you write the next chapter!!!!!...*hugs and kisses...wow its sooo brilliant!!

deto
01-30-2007, 12:37 PM
Chapter 3 will be known as "Too far off track"

Lucki
01-30-2007, 05:22 PM
ooooh that sounds coool!!!...*waits eagerly for next chapter..goes get popcorn sits and waits*...eeeee...exciting!

deto
01-30-2007, 08:06 PM
*****CHAPTER 3 : TOO FAR OFF TRACK*****


The clouds were thick that day, a cool breeze came from the north followed by a hail
of rain. The elf had only little rest, he was marching the whole night but now under
the light of the day he discovered that it was indeed a bad idea to wander through
the night. the mountains did look all the same and he was going to far south, towards
the Dimrill Dale. Somewhere in front of him was the entrance to the mines of moria
and behind him lay the enchanted woods of lothlorien where lady Galadriel dwells.
Rivendell was now far away in the north and couldn't be reached that fast and that
way he could never pursue the goblins that were marching south in this very hour, even
with an elven horse he could not overtake them. his clothes were soaked with water and
even his never tiring legs began to move slower and harder. he was tired from the battle,
from the hiding, the marching, the running. in his thoughts he was in a better place,
from his coat he removed a brown bag wrapped in a big green leaf, inside was lembas,
elfish waybread, only a little piece can fill the stomach of a full grown man and spends
power for a day. he took a little bite and already felt his limbs feeling less numb,
it revived both his spirit and his body but his supplies were running low, he looked at
the bag in his hand, two more slices. Now he realised that this would bring him never to
Rivendell, he had to abort his initial route and make way for another. Even if the mines
were closer he turned around to reach Lothlorien. The relationship between elves and
dwarfs was already breaking, dwarfs were suspecious and likewise were the elves. So
he decided rather to be among kin folk instead of counting on the hospitality of dwarfs.
Caradras the mountain under which Moria lay was towering high behind the elf, it looked
pale under the grey clouds, a cool chill run through the elf - it has been a while since
he saw that mountain so close. because of the thick fog in the night he couldn't see it
he was guideless in that night, almost as if some evil was hiding the land in a veil to
remain unseen.

in the same time the host of the goblins had to face the same problems, they were going
south-east all the way towards the Ash Mountains, the Ered Lithui. In the night a terribly
stench came into their noses, a stench as if thousand rotting corpses were laying on a
pile. They were at the borders of the Dead Marshes how the orcs call it, among the people
of the west it was known as Dagorlad, the Battlefield. Many years ago elves, mens and
orcs died there in the great battles when Middle Earth was still in the deadly clench of
Morgoth, the black foe of whom Sauron was just a servant. It is said, that sometimes in
the night you can still hear the terrible voices and cries of the fallen ones coming from
the Marshes. A strange dim green light was everywhere and the goblins made way for the
light unwillingly, as if trapped by a spell they turned further south untill they were
deep in the Dead Marshes. When day came it was no big difference to the night, it was
dark and only few things could be seen. Grabash was leading the horde through the Marshes
while he was cursing this place, few of his host never left the Marshes alive. in the
night they were following the lights into the water and never came out, as soon as
they dived, their eyes were cheated by some spell and the dead bodies became alive, with
horrible ghost-like faces they were reaching for whoever drowned in the pool of sorrows.
Grabash ordered them not to set foor into the water for he had heard the stories of the
great wars in the past and also the things they said about the Dagorlad.

By the time Grabash and his gang reached the Dead Marshes, the elf came to the edge of
the enchanted woods, infront of him was Lothlorien. Realm of Lady Galadriel and Celeborn.
he made his way in and crossed the small river Nimrodel. The sun was covering the woods
in golden light and the trees looked like towers of silver. the air was fresh and his
mind seemed to grow easy the deeper he went. All evil was forgotten for he seemed to enter
another world, a world in which time means nothing. he went further in and the light
changed from gold into silver white, here were thicker trees, Mallorn how the elves call
them. Kings among trees, nowhere else in the world could such trees be found. As he
reached a wide open spot under the trees he heard a soft but commaning voice "DARO!"
He stopped in his track and behind the trees elves with bows appeared, with arrows ready
to shoot in case their target would disobey. Usually they don't ask or talk to enemies
that get lost and in their misery enter the woods, for they couldn't go in a hundred
yards without being pierced by dozens of arrows. But they felt that this stranger was
no enemy, the aura that came from him was something they have never felt before but yet
it seemed familiar. The chief of the elves was standing right in front of him: "Tell me
your name and your business, stranger." he commanded using the common speech. The elf
remained unmoved and spoke slowly "Haste is my business, please bring me to Galadriel."
this time in the elven tongue. "The Lady of the Wood decides herself whether she wants
to talk to someone or not, and you still haven't told me your name, or shall i call you
stranger?" asked the elven chieftain in a firmer voice. The elf surrounded by all those
archers raised his hands to his hood and casted it back, his long golden hair and proud
face was finally revealed. He looked like one of the elf-lords of old times, his eyes
kind but keen, his face warm but proud. "You may call me Glorfindel!" said the elf, and
by mentioning that name, the archers lowered their bows and their faces were filled
with surprise and wonder. The elven chieftain bowed low, "Forgive me lord, i did not
reconize you, I'm Haldir of Lorien, at your service. Please follow me, i'll bring you
to Lady Galardiel on the fastest way." The little group of elves behind Haldir was
going deeper towards the heart of the wood, where the Lady and the Lord were sitting
in their palace of trees. She sprang up as she saw Glorfindel approaching, running towards
him and greeting him like a long lost brother. He was invited for a feast and to recover
from his wearyness, while he was telling the story and who he was chasing. Galadriel and
Celeborn were eager to learn every detail. "So they are making their move" said Celeborn,
looking to Galadriel. "We have felt that something was at hand, but we did not think of
it happen so soon. The Goblins and Orcs are preparing something. A lot of them have
travelled to the land of Mordor." Glorfindel was only listening untill he spoke "Can
you think of anything what they might be doing?" - "We can't be sure untill we go and find
out, but Sauron has been driven away from his stronghold in the Mirkwood, Dol Guldur is
destroyed and empty." Glorfindel was in deep thoughts, "So he went to Mordor, a land
that is well known to him, since he was a servant of the black foe." he concluded. Both
Celeborn and Galadriel nodded. "I'll go to Mordor and find out what the enemy is about,
but i'm in need of supplies and a horse if you can spare one." - "Ours is yours." said
Galadriel and leading Glorfindel inside her palace. She gave him supplies for his journey
as well as a new cloak with the words "May it hide you well from evil eyes." Thankfully
Glorfindel took the gifts from Galadriel and Celeborn.
He spent some time in Lorien, but how long no one knows, for time can not be counted
in this woods. He was given Asfaloth, it is said to be one of the fastest among
the elven horses. With that and his supplies he took off from Lorien, thanking the Lady
and Lord for their hospitality and their aid.

It was about the time when Glorfindel met the Lady and the Lord in Lorien that Grabash
reached the end of the Dead Marshes and walked through a ravine where the black gate once
was. Grabash was marching on direct way across the plateau of Gorgoroth towards Orodruin,
better known as Mount Doom. After they passed Udûn they were greeted by a host of orcs
that must have reached not too long ago. Shagrat was their leader and he was the one who
was in charge of the plateau. "Oi! You there! Where are you coming from" - "who wants
to know that?" Grabash snarled. "I'm the boss of this plateau you maggot, i'm Shagrat
the great!" - "We come from the Grey Mountains" - "Oh! Ha! A long way to Mordor, but its
not time to rest yet. The eye has orders for everyone who arrives!" - "So he is here?!"
Grabash and his host was dumb struck, never did they believe that after he had been
driven out of Dol Guldur he would recover that fast and already make new plans. But they
did not mind, since they knew there would soon be time to cover the world in darkness.
"Go get your orders." commanded Shagrat and let Grabash pass. "To the Tower of Barad-Dur
you have to go!" Grabash waved with his arm and lead the way towards the pitch black
horizon of Mordor.

Lucki
01-30-2007, 08:25 PM
aaaaaaa ZOMG...it keeps getting better and better!!!!!!..*huge applause* ..aaaa its brilliant!!!! ...*can't wait again till the next chapter..eeeeee...waits eagerly*...*kisses*

deto
01-30-2007, 08:27 PM
Chapter 4 will be released under the title "Arise from Ashes"
and will most likely be posted on Thursday evening.

Evanesque
01-31-2007, 05:09 AM
*Ev poofs in*

Still going pretty good! *cookies*

*Ev poofs out*
:redbiggri

deto
01-31-2007, 06:47 AM
can someone die cuz of overdose on cookies? :redbiggri

Evanesque
02-02-2007, 08:20 AM
I'm happy you love them :redbiggri

When is your next part going to be posted?

deto
02-02-2007, 08:26 AM
uhm.... hopefully somewhen 2morrow, something came accross yesterday
so i couldn't continue :x

deto
02-06-2007, 05:29 PM
*****CHAPTER 4 : ARISE FROM ASHES*****

A deep and trembling sound echoed from the encircling mountains, the war drums of the
trolls could be heard everywhere. Grabash arrived with his host in the land of Mordor,
this place where many battle had been fought in the elder days. The place Melkor himself
choose to conquer middle earth. The Necromancer who once was Melkors servant finally
came back here to pursue his masters plan, to cover the world in darkness and rule over
all that lives under the sun.
Grabash first objective was to go to the mountain pass, known as Cirith Ungol, and
re-open the watchtower.
Leaving the sound of drums and the screaming of orders behind, he lead his group towards
the Ephel Duath, the mountain chain in the west. On the other side of the pass was the
city of man, they called it Minas Ithil, the Moon Tower it meant.

The way was long and not seldom they had to climb. There was a little stairway that was
unused for many years. The Goblins were swearing and cursing this mountain, they were
marching so far and now they still had no rest, more walking and climbing they must.
The sky above them grew darker, but in Mordor you can hardly tell the difference between
night and day for the sky is always dark as coal.
they finally reached a spot that looked like the top, a small ravine lead a bit further
up. one after another they followed the narrow way, beside them the stones were towering
high and a strong wind blew giving forth a sound as if hundreds of wolves were howling
nearby. after another hour they reached the tower of Cirith Ungol, the host behind
Grabash hurried inside, just as the last 5 were about to enter, Grabash himself blocked
the doorway. "You! Go check the way that leads into the caves!", they weren't really
happy with that order, but disobeying would be as good as being killed. So the five of
them made their way towards the caves and as soon as they vanished out of Grabash's sight
he turned and went into the tower. Finally he was chief of his own stronghold, it was not
that big and rather far off but at least he could do whatever he wanted up here. He smiled
and sat upon his throne in the tower of Cirith Ungol. Meanwhile the Goblin patrol got closer
to the caves. They could even see the entrance as suddenly a terrible stench came into
their noses, even for a goblin this smell was terrible. One of them went closer but the
others were standing back telling him not to go there. The entrance was covered with some
kind of web, thick white threads like a rope were hanging there, he tried to move them
aside to step in and take a closer look, but they instantly wrapped around his body and
he couldn't move any further. He removed his sword from his sheath and tried to cut the
web but no stroke seemed to do anything to it, at this time a terrifying roar came from
deep inside the cave, fear struck the Goblin let go his sword and waved with his arms,
trying to break free from this sticky cage he was in. Two of the Goblins that stood back
turned as they heard the roar and ran as if their lives would depend on it. The two others
could move, they never felt such an abyssal fear before, not even wen they reached their
camp and found their brothers slewn. Out of the darkness eight little lights appeared,
glowing faintly and looking at the prey, at his horror filled face. There were two strong
insect-like legs stepping out, pinning the Goblin in the web to the ground, leaving two
big holes in his body. Now even the remaining two Goblins were running, they didn't care
what Grabash would say, they knew that whatever got their comrade was alot older and
more wicked than their chieftain.

They ran for a good half an hour untill they finally reached the tower of Cirith Ungol
again and suddenly found out that no one before them came taht far.
Storming in, they found a not so amused Grabash "Oi! He! What are you scumbags doing
here already? Didn't i tell you to check the caves?" As the two scouts however told
him about the evil that lies deep within the caves his face was grave, he couldn't
believe what he heard. It sounded like the shadow of old Ungoliant herself was hiding
in the caves. As fast as he loved his new fortress he started to hate it, he felt like
being placed there to keep Mordor safe of this terrible beast up in the mountain pass
and if it really was something like Ungoliant of which many tales exist even he and all
of his host wouldn't be able to stop her.

A messanger was sent into the night to get to Barad Dur to investigate and gather info
about what was up there and why no one else wanted to go to the pass of Cirith Ungol.
With that Grabash was sitting back on his throne and waited for answers.

Lucki
02-06-2007, 05:57 PM
:O...that is sooo amazing!!! i really got into that...aaah.cant wait for the next chapter!!..*applauds*..seriously wow its awesome!!

VampyreLord
02-06-2007, 06:28 PM
xaimai, your posts are becoming tediously spammy here. Please post proper CNC rather than several posts of sillyness about popcorn.

Evanesque
02-11-2007, 06:37 AM
*pokes* Chill Nathan, I'm sure she won't do it again..

@di: So far, it's going pretty good. I'm amazed by your writing skills =0
Let teh hobbits in your mind run those hamster wheels in your head more faster!!!

I find your titles are very attractive, by the way :p

*Ririn*
02-15-2007, 04:25 PM
wow...this is good...so far im loving this lots of goblin and dwarf fights...what even inspired you?? *hugs* keep it coming though its just getting exciting *thinks of the monster ghost*