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Mighty Aramir
02-02-2007, 06:35 AM
Well, this is my first work here, hope you enjoy it:
As the fullmoon awakes
over the starless night,
it's never ending beauty
clouds my mind.

Memories of love bloom
beyond the velvet sea,
for the face of my beloved
I might never see.

Six months since she left the docks
six months of sorrow alone,
six months to go
until she can return...

The feeling of her breathing
while we lay together sleeping,
her scent on my mind engraved,
to see her my last desire before the grave.

On this cold night I behold
and while my transformation takes place,
I only wish on this night
to sleep forever in my vampiress' embrace.

Ai
02-02-2007, 06:45 PM
It has an extremely nice flow to it and it has a nice theme.

A perfectly delivered flow ensured the idea and the point behind it stayed fresh in my mind..I'm glad you made your first post here that one and i look forward to seeing more of your pieces of poetry.

Mighty Aramir
02-14-2007, 03:15 AM
Thanx man! appreciate it!

Isis
02-14-2007, 01:05 PM
Knowing the story behind this was beautiful. *huggles aniki* Well done Gus :)

Mighty Aramir
02-14-2007, 01:27 PM
oh yesh... *blushes* thanks Shaz!

SoundWave
02-14-2007, 02:55 PM
Sweet man.. like it loads.. Keep 'em coming!

Mighty Aramir
02-17-2007, 02:34 PM
Thanx bro!! \m/

Nesquik
02-20-2007, 02:44 AM
Sweet, nice theme

Askand
02-21-2007, 03:15 PM
I really like the theme. ALthough I didnt realize it till the end. I love the rhythm and the flow it was soft and easy. You can enjoy it while getting the feeling. Its an excellent Poem MA. *hugs* awesome!!

Evanesque
02-25-2007, 05:36 AM
How come I didn't notice this thread? o_O

Love the poem, I don't think it's your first, you've written many poems, haven't you? @_@

Anyway, the poem, as everyone's been saying has a smooth flowy texture. It's a beautiful vampire romance poem!
*cookies*

Mighty Aramir
02-25-2007, 05:39 AM
in here... *points at the first line * but thanx sis... love ya!!!

Lucki
02-25-2007, 03:09 PM
that was really beautiful!! gave me butterfly's O.O! it created such a vivid picture in my mind! it defiantly drew me in!

Mighty Aramir
02-27-2007, 02:04 AM
Thanx Xai!
Gracias Askand!
*bows* im glad you like it!