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Mighty Aramir
02-05-2007, 03:53 PM
well.... I dunno, as usual ideas just starting poping in my mind and this happened to be one of them:
Embalmed in velvet bandages
my heart froze and cried.
Another loss, another scar
I can never leave this web of lies.

And then from the sea you arose,
innocent, beautiful, not a single flaw.
Delutions, deceive clouded my mind
that's more than any mortal saw.

But you came and held me in your embrace,
and by the simplest action kissed my sorrow away...
And now I hang by a thread,
a velvet line between life and death.

Your arms turned cold,
so did your heart...
And without a doubt in my mind,
I let go of the line....
http://i142.photobucket.com/albums/r119/MightyAramir666/Threads.jpg
Evanesque
02-05-2007, 05:40 PM
Oh this poem! Love it love it love it!!!

Btw:
decieve = wrong
deceive = correct

Awesome poem bro *huggles*
*cookies*
Isis
02-07-2007, 04:04 AM
Aramir, great poem, me like-s it ^_^

Btw, delutions? I think you meant delusion? *prods*

Nicely done =P
Ai
02-07-2007, 03:17 PM
Another nice poem, A nice chaser after reading your previous one.

A nice even flow throughout it and it showed that you thought about the words as you put them on paper and then prepared it to show to the forum.

Lovely work keep em coming.
Mighty Aramir
02-07-2007, 07:48 PM
Sorry for the typing or grammar if its wrong, english is not my first language, but thanks for reading, I really appreciate it T-T... *cookies for all*
Isis
02-07-2007, 11:24 PM
*huggles* Nah, its ok. Technically english should be my second language but Ive grown up with it so yeah. It's still a great poem Aramir :)
Mighty Aramir
02-17-2007, 02:32 PM
Ohhh.. Thanx nee-san!! *glomps*
Lady Ushio
03-17-2007, 07:33 AM
vandages = incorrect
bandages = correct

What a handwriting, btw.
Thanks for sharing.
Mighty Aramir
03-18-2007, 07:50 AM
Thanks for the correction... *edits post*
And bout the handwritting, its the start, the brainstorm, thats why it also has lots and lots of corrections
Lady Ushio
03-19-2007, 06:13 PM
that's a proof of your work anyway... :)
you're very welcome...
>BANKAI RIROU<
03-30-2007, 12:21 PM
i don`t now anything about thi poetry !!!???
Mighty Aramir
03-31-2007, 01:59 AM
=_="
Then dont post spammer...