Delirious whimpering of the weak

[SoundWave]

Have you ever tasted the crimson rain
Incured by a life in shame
When will be the day
That I won't live in dismay

If I could bring something back
Would it be another disaster

How am I supposed to be lucky in this plaster

Lying here all alone I keep thinking

How did you do
The things you do

It's way too empty now
So what the hell do you think
I have lived to loose

No brilliance can fill the ruins of your soul
You are the one
My first and last
My all and everything

How fucking long do you think I can keep this up
Life's but a race against time in this dump

So hear these words I say
I can't stand living through each day
Life's but a series of goodbye's

This time it's my turn to reach the end
I refuse to take this anymore my friend

So excuse me while I end my life
In This life there are no happy endings
I'm gonna make it right once and for all
I won't say bye bye

Only **** you too!

[Mighty Aramir]

O.O very strong feelings, very deeply embed in life's normal suffering, great poem man, as expected ^^

[benothebeno]

Omfg i wish i could write like you >_> im a newb poet

[Decado]

as above posters. feelings come across well, i really like the mood of your poems. This one seemed more forceful than the others, and it was still great

I wish I could write poetry. You've inspired me

[SoundWave]

I'm sure you can dec :) give it a shot..

Beno: Haha.. I bet you could be even better :p

thnx for the comments

[Askand]

Very stong feelings I agree with Mighty on that also a sense of weariness. So much things on mind and a good way to vent them. Good poem darling, you must know I keep writing thanks to your work. Keep it up and this *bag full of diverse chocolate sticks* *kiss**grins*

[Anarchy]

Thought I'd check this one out because it was made by one of my FC members and I was very pleased it was a very good poem. The way the words flow and the way you told us how you feel was brilliant. I give this 5 out of 5 stars