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Askand
03-30-2007, 04:37 AM
The inspiration and the situation that made this poem a reality came on different times. I was talking with Syche about fights and like a couple of hours later (like 1 am precisely :P) The funny thing was that I had to be up by 4 am cause I was working it took me 10 minutes to write it, so I took a second look and made a few changes. I hope you like it. Thanks Syche *kiss*
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The Will of a Warrior

Today you lost a fight
Today another warrior beat you up
And although you say you don’t care
It’s frustration that your eyes show me instead

You seem to lost the will to fight
The will to feel the lust for a battle
The sound of clashing metals or cracking bones
You seemed to had reached your limit
Still standing before you
A long road ahead is waiting for you

The times had may changed
The rules bend and soften
The battle till submission
Since dead is now forbidden
But the honor will still remain intact
The cause untouched like a maiden
Prevailing till yet evolves into
Something different yet still true to his essence.

You may had lost your will
But in deep a warrior you kept yourself to be
Whether is for love, hate or sorrow
Whether is for revenge, oath or regret
Your will be fighting till your will
Gets back

Because no matter how many battles you fight and loose
The war is still on
Time will give you back you what you lost
Love will give you back what you lost
Hate can give you back what you lost
And after the time has come and the war has been won
The new path for you warrior is going back home.

Mighty Aramir
03-30-2007, 04:42 AM
I like it a lot!
very good!!
Vivan los latinos!!
Yeah i know...shitty line but wth!?

>BANKAI RIROU<
03-30-2007, 11:32 AM
i like it and there so latin word... you know that

Decado
03-30-2007, 11:50 AM
ah nice. This caught my eye

hm.. it may be your "style" of writing - but just some things that i noticed


You seem to lost the will to fight
seem to have?

You seemed to had reached your limit
seemed to have (again)

The times had may changed
The times may have changed?
tho yours prob works too, for sake of poem

i esp like this part:

The times had may changed
The rules bend and soften
The battle till submission
Since dead is now forbidden

it may change ur flow, or the like, but if 'forbidden' was "forgotten" - that would be cool :) tho i know wat u mean here.

nice one Askand

>BANKAI RIROU<
03-30-2007, 11:57 AM
you say that make your eye laugh but me make my ears laugh........................

Decado
03-30-2007, 12:03 PM
wat?

>BANKAI RIROU<
03-30-2007, 12:11 PM
yeah that`s right

Askand
03-30-2007, 03:14 PM
thanks Dequi I will make the changes I sometimes might eat the words. LOL
but I'm glad you liked it^^

About the last sentence "Since dead is now forbidden" I wrote it on purpose since if you really fight on these days is very rare to see a match ending on a death. That is if the fight is forbidden. Hence the purpose of using that world instead of forbidden.