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Silhouette
04-02-2007, 09:54 PM
LMAO! This is a random poem that I just made up...like 2 minutes ago. It isn't a serious poem...or is it? By reading this, you can probably tell that I don't write poems often...or at all. Its an amatuer poem, so keep that in mind... :whatevah:

PS. Not all of the lines rhyme. Why? Because I'm too lazy for that. -_-" Slant rhymes perhaps? O_o;


One day little Betty-Anne woke up and saw the sun
She danced and danced under this one until its time was done
And at that night, she sobbed and weeped and swore they'd meet again
Till morning came and fun and joy was once more their great gain
Later that day, the clouds flew by and stole her shiny friend
She sobbed and weeped and yelled and swore to meet him once again

That night the clouds ran off and she gazed upon the moon
It was not as bright as her friend, but it would have to do
She jumped for joy and spent her time with it till the clouds returned
She frowned and scowled the clouds, and wished them all to be burned
Alas, her prayer went unanswered, or so little Betty-Anne thought
For moments later, her bright friend returned, and once more was gentle joy brought

The two played and played and played until Betty-Anne grew tired
She went inside her cramped cramped room until things got dire
For, to her surprise, the room was much much hotter
Than any other time she went there to retire
She yawned and shrugged it off, and said that nothing mattered
But boy oh boy was she to pay for the moon whom she had flattered

For that previous night which Betty-Anne spent with the not so glorius moon
The sun had seen, and was struck by deep dread and gloom
Nature, you see, can be quite harsh at times
For little Betty-Anne would soon find by reading through the lines
It grew hotter and hotter and stiffer and stiffer till she opened up the window
And it was then that a not so gentle beam of red struck her with its woe

Down and down little Betty-Anne fell, until she hit the floor
Though the Sun was not through. No! It had much more
But when she had awakened, she found, to her surprise
That the pleasant clouds of storm had shielded her from its lies
So did little Betty-Anne hide under their fluffy whiteness
Till they were all joined by a soft and yellow brightness

Betty-Anne grew scared, but was assured of her safety by the clouds
For the one who's glimmer they gazed upon was of one whom wasn't foul
Her not so glorious acquaintance had once more arrived
She jumped for joy and laughed and prayed, just thankful to be alive
The night was young, but alas, time makes fools of us all
For Nature itself is to fear, because it tames all things...large and small

Mighty Aramir
04-02-2007, 10:46 PM
third thingy (paragraph like): Their---> there
And over all, very good, i like the idea...
*smacks Taso*
Congrats!

Silhouette
04-02-2007, 10:51 PM
Ah, didn't notice that, thanks.

*smacks back* Thanks for the comment. >.>;

angelicdesire
04-02-2007, 10:55 PM
wow sean

thats rly good

good job

Silhouette
04-03-2007, 01:13 PM
19 views...2 replies. I hate that. =_="

Come on people, even if its not good enough to comment on...comment on how bad it was? >.>

Decado
04-03-2007, 01:24 PM
lmao indeed.
quite funny at times, esp cos it's comin from u.. heh


It was not as bright as her friend, but it would have to due

do..


That was good man!

Have to ask tho... wat brought that on..? esp the theme and such.. of using "little Betty-Anne"
play on metaphors..?


Come on people, even if its not good enough to comment on...comment on how bad it was? >.>
yeah Sess.
/me points to MB thread.

Silhouette
04-03-2007, 01:38 PM
*edits...typo..* *coughs*

lmao. Its funny really. It was all random. I just started typing it yesterday...and posted it a few minutes after. Betty-Anne was just a random name I picked, since it flows well..?

VinSRedMoon
04-03-2007, 02:10 PM
Too lengthy just like a short story but funny and good job

Askand
04-04-2007, 01:06 AM
Well I'mm impressed, althought you said there is not rhyme its is, you just have to let it flow. On this case althought is random still there is atory to tell a lesson to learn. *giggles* I always do that without noticing it till is late.
But I think you should hear this random feelings and let them go out. I really like it.
Btw, dont complain about no one reading your stuff cause I do that also. Besides you never had read mine. lol, Good job Set is really a wonderful lecture.
Good work

Silhouette
04-04-2007, 12:21 PM
Psh. I read your Bleach fic...which you stopped writing. *coughs*

Thanks though. >.>;

*points everyone to the Fics section* -_-"

Ren
04-04-2007, 01:02 PM
Sess!! that was kinda cute! XD The title caught my attention :D

I like the name Betty-Anne too. Reminds me of those girl characters in Enid Blyton's children stories ^^

Didnt expect this from you, but i like it anyway ^^