Insight
07-09-2007, 01:02 PM
hi i'm posting my first bleach fanfic here.
it's set after the winter war and is called insight (note i named myself after the fanfic not the fanfic after me, i'm not that egotistical.)
hope you like.
It was cold. Unnaturally so, even I could feel it, but you got used to it.
A side effect of the war and the return of a king to the world. His sword guard which had won the war for us.
Victory had been ours, the hated enemy defeated after so long.
No longer did we have to live in fear. No longer did we have to deal with their threat.
We had won.
We no longer had to live outside the real world, but could stay here as we pleased, do as we pleased….eat what we pleased.
“AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH”
I screamed violently against my will, unable to control myself, as power pounded down on me
This reiatsu, what the hell. A Hollow? Why was there such a strong hollow reiatsu around? Was it an espada? Some had survived. Had one returned to the real world?
This power made an unfamiliar and unwelcome feeling return.
FEAR.
I had finally been freed of it but now, it was brought back. Instinctive fear I wanted it removed. Never had I hungered for anything so much, but this…feeling destroyed.
I must find it's source. Whoever it is, I don’t care.
I flashed across the ground stopping just far away enough to avoid the reiatsu crushing me. I could just see in the distance the central figure no bigger then those around him.
Wait shapes around him, even this close I couldn’t sense them, their reiatsu so completely obscured by this hollow one.
But wait this figure was clothed in black, not white like an espada. Had it changed it's look. A mockery to the shinigami perhaps.
But this black was unnatural and the figure moved so fast. Faster then shunpo or soinido, and the blackness, as though light itself couldn’t keep up. But was sucked in, as were the figures around it sucked in and crushed by this demon.
Figures which had seemed familiar.
And the mask. The glinting of a mask stood out against the black.
The massacre was over quicker then a flash.
“AAARRRRGGGHHH” my scream out loud again. But I couldn’t help it. I had seen into it’s eyes, such terrible eyes. Eyes of death. Black and bottomless.
I had been heard.
RUN!
BAM.
I had barely turned and it was right in front of me. This demon.
“What are you?” I hissed my voice full of an unnatural malice.
“A shinigami” it replied, with even more malice and a smile of enjoyment on it’s face.
“Don’t make me laugh; you are a bigger demon then I” feeling myself starting to tremble. “There are no more shinigami left. We won.”
“We shall see, hollow”
“HISS!” I unfurled myself snakelike. “You shall fall. You cannot fight our tide shinigami. You are one of the last and we grow stronger by the day, feeding”
“And I will destroy you all” his sword swept up and fiery orange hair swept down.
I awoke, my breathing heavy and shivered and not from the cold but from what I had just seen…and felt.
I looked out across the endless nothingness. The void. It was the site of our great victory. The new King, Aizen had ascended here, along with his swords.
Were once there had been a town now only a huge gapping maw. This hole sucked in everything.
Heat, People and even Time.
Staying by it for too long was very dangerous, it could suck you in. But the reward had been worth the risk.
Insight.
Insight into the future.
That dream a vision of what was to come. I had foreseen my death.
“HAHAHAHA”.
I would leave this site of reflective glory to Feed; To grow strong and become a demon.
I would DESTROY that shinigami!
i want to know what you think but don't want useless "i liked it" or "i didn't like it" so i have some questions and would be grateful if you could answer them.
what do you think of the general idea.
any thoughts for improving my writing style.
what do you think to the setting and the idea of the maw and time.
what did you think to the main character bieng a hollow.
was it unexpected and did you like the hints to it.
finaly should i write more in this story, write about something different or give up writing completely
thanks a lot.
hope you enjoy
it's set after the winter war and is called insight (note i named myself after the fanfic not the fanfic after me, i'm not that egotistical.)
hope you like.
It was cold. Unnaturally so, even I could feel it, but you got used to it.
A side effect of the war and the return of a king to the world. His sword guard which had won the war for us.
Victory had been ours, the hated enemy defeated after so long.
No longer did we have to live in fear. No longer did we have to deal with their threat.
We had won.
We no longer had to live outside the real world, but could stay here as we pleased, do as we pleased….eat what we pleased.
“AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH”
I screamed violently against my will, unable to control myself, as power pounded down on me
This reiatsu, what the hell. A Hollow? Why was there such a strong hollow reiatsu around? Was it an espada? Some had survived. Had one returned to the real world?
This power made an unfamiliar and unwelcome feeling return.
FEAR.
I had finally been freed of it but now, it was brought back. Instinctive fear I wanted it removed. Never had I hungered for anything so much, but this…feeling destroyed.
I must find it's source. Whoever it is, I don’t care.
I flashed across the ground stopping just far away enough to avoid the reiatsu crushing me. I could just see in the distance the central figure no bigger then those around him.
Wait shapes around him, even this close I couldn’t sense them, their reiatsu so completely obscured by this hollow one.
But wait this figure was clothed in black, not white like an espada. Had it changed it's look. A mockery to the shinigami perhaps.
But this black was unnatural and the figure moved so fast. Faster then shunpo or soinido, and the blackness, as though light itself couldn’t keep up. But was sucked in, as were the figures around it sucked in and crushed by this demon.
Figures which had seemed familiar.
And the mask. The glinting of a mask stood out against the black.
The massacre was over quicker then a flash.
“AAARRRRGGGHHH” my scream out loud again. But I couldn’t help it. I had seen into it’s eyes, such terrible eyes. Eyes of death. Black and bottomless.
I had been heard.
RUN!
BAM.
I had barely turned and it was right in front of me. This demon.
“What are you?” I hissed my voice full of an unnatural malice.
“A shinigami” it replied, with even more malice and a smile of enjoyment on it’s face.
“Don’t make me laugh; you are a bigger demon then I” feeling myself starting to tremble. “There are no more shinigami left. We won.”
“We shall see, hollow”
“HISS!” I unfurled myself snakelike. “You shall fall. You cannot fight our tide shinigami. You are one of the last and we grow stronger by the day, feeding”
“And I will destroy you all” his sword swept up and fiery orange hair swept down.
I awoke, my breathing heavy and shivered and not from the cold but from what I had just seen…and felt.
I looked out across the endless nothingness. The void. It was the site of our great victory. The new King, Aizen had ascended here, along with his swords.
Were once there had been a town now only a huge gapping maw. This hole sucked in everything.
Heat, People and even Time.
Staying by it for too long was very dangerous, it could suck you in. But the reward had been worth the risk.
Insight.
Insight into the future.
That dream a vision of what was to come. I had foreseen my death.
“HAHAHAHA”.
I would leave this site of reflective glory to Feed; To grow strong and become a demon.
I would DESTROY that shinigami!
i want to know what you think but don't want useless "i liked it" or "i didn't like it" so i have some questions and would be grateful if you could answer them.
what do you think of the general idea.
any thoughts for improving my writing style.
what do you think to the setting and the idea of the maw and time.
what did you think to the main character bieng a hollow.
was it unexpected and did you like the hints to it.
finaly should i write more in this story, write about something different or give up writing completely
thanks a lot.
hope you enjoy