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DJ StarScream
08-30-2007, 03:27 AM
Death is coming
Crawling smiling
Calling you're name
Death is calling
Crawling coming
Laughing at you're shame
Death has come Death has won
Now you die in shame
Death is calling now your crawling
Crawling after him.

Isis
08-31-2007, 02:21 AM
Nice poem, however don't use the letter 'r' because it disrupts the flow. As well you spelt you're wrong :P

DJ StarScream
08-31-2007, 03:05 AM
The r wasn't meant to be in there. >.< I'll fix the grammer errors.