*Autumn Rose*

[Reneto]

Autumn Rose

The autumn rose knows
what it has been
and where it must go
now that the sun
is no longer the friend
its once was

a victim of the faling days
pedal torn
in the cooling breeze haze
color confused
in the waning
hay days

more frail and withered
more pale and frittered
than before
vigorless almost still
fragrant but
much less than more

the autumn rose knows
pity the poor rose

[Isis]

Your poem is a tad confusing, one which I don't understand ^___^; Sorry.

[beng072488]

i could not understand
can u use simple words

[Reneto]

you just must to know this is a dramatical poetry of this earth...........so that`s i mean is the auntumn rose know what wiil be done in the future

[Isis]

No, I understand what its about except your use of words and grammar is wrong which makes it confusing.

[Reneto]

yeah you can guessit...congratulations.......i just want to make a hard grammar and a hard thinking

[Jaran]

Hmm. I'm guessing English isn't your first language...

Anywho, I understand what you meant by it, and although it's a very common imagery (the withered rose in autumn) it still has a little use to it, I suppose.

Next poem you make, try to use some ideas that haven't been worn away at since time immemorial, and I'm sure you'll do better.

[Reneto]

yes, sir i will try........to make more attractive poem not include memorandum