Dark Timeless Space

[Iro]

Staring at the empty skies above
The once starry night has faded
I find myself, trapped once again
Hiding in my own shadow, I am lost

I gaze in the void that has captured me
Fearful, ashamed and hurt, I cry
The earth is still, the waters unclear
I find my own reflection distorted

Has my life’s journey ended?
In the depths of the unknown
I forever linger in this unfilled space
Time has betrayed me, I am forever alone

[Miss Murder]

It's reaaly deep and kinda cool, for me.

[Isis]

Kinda reminds me of Kingdom Hearts for some reason XD.

Love the piece, its very moving and deep. I however have the line 'The once starry night have faded' gnawing at my head. I think the word 'have' is really out of place in that line, replacing it with 'has' doesn't make the line too awkward and it flows better.

Keep writing though :) They're good!

[Iro]

haha thanks for the comment! this was a rushed piece btw i just needed to write down my thoughts but thanks for the grammar check! i really appreciate it =p