In Search of Sanctuary

[yoko lee]

"In Search of Sanctuary"

I've searched my heart for answers
Yes, and I searched it in vain
I thought my pride can keep me company
Yet, it was all in vain.

I've searched my heart for sanctuary
A silent sanctuary to keep me sane
I danced the dance of the lonely
I thought I'd never see the pain.

But the song of the angels moved me
The ray of sunshine touched me
You said my cheeks burned bright red, how lovely
You kindly stopped for me.

Yes, you kindly stopped for me
In my search for long-lasting sanctuary.

[Isis]

It's a lovely poem Yoko :) However, I got a bit confused because you kept changing back from present to past tense.


I've searched my heart for answers
Yes, and I searched it in vain
I thought my pride can keep me company
Yet, it was all in vain.
The second line seems a bit odd for some reason ^_^; Perhaps it might go better with "Yes, I've searched it in vain". The word 'can' might be better off replaced with 'could'.

Still loved it nonetheless. Keep writing :)

[yoko lee]

Okay. I'll take your advice. Thank you! :)

[Murder1]

I enjoyed it very much. I liked the way it jumped, kept my mind adjusting back and forth.:biggrinki