Seff's second evar poem.

[Seff vi Britannia]

This is final,
my last unholy stand
Corrupted by sin,
good men twisted,
and made into pawns of the administration

No longer can i be pure,
unlike those who died around me
the twisted sound - shattering war
pounds into my burst drums
as i lie to die

i could stand to fall,
if i had belief
yet here i sit and slouch
knowing that my life is worthless
we are worthless, to them.



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Because i have to write one for my GCSE next year, figured i should get a head-start now...

[Isis]

Awesomeness Sam ^^ Really liked it, write more :P Good practice.

[Evanesque]

You write poems??? The end is near -.-

But that's a really good poem for someone your age
*applauds*

[Seff vi Britannia]

You write poems??? The end is near -.-

But that's a really good poem for someone your age
*applauds*

Excuse me?

[Isis]

Lmao, I think its obvious that she hasn't read poems from younger people. I started writing when I was 12 lawl.

[Artemis]

She's read my poems.
Heck, she even displays one of my anthems (dedicated to her).

Nice job, Sam.
:)

[Baby-Pie]

i could stand to fall,
if i had belief
yet here i sit and slouch
knowing that my life is worthless
we are worthless, to them.


i love that...good work sam *hugs*..and this is the second one?? neat

[Seff vi Britannia]

Heck, she even displays one of my anthems (dedicated to her).



She's vain like that :O

[Yamamoto]

That's really good ^^

I like the assonance in "i lie to die"

basically the second stanza with the pound and the war drum stuff, I like that image :)