Alone

[DJ StarScream]

I am forever alone.
Inside my head there is no control.
Forever there is chaos because.
Of you and what your memory caused.
Forever i shall love you.
Yet even though i would like to hug you.
Over and over again thinking of you is so immense.
I search in my head to remember that name.
That saved me so from the insane shame.
That memory that was so cherised is now gone lost forever.....

[Isis]

I'm not gonna talk about grammar and that because that is how you write :P I loved the poem, it was really good :) Loved the theme ^^

[Lex]

Pretty good!

[DJ StarScream]

XD I guess that is my style now. If you want i could change it up. Lex if you could please say more than pretty good I would appreciate it.

[Seff vi Britannia]

"Yet even though i would like to hug you."

that line seems to break the rthym when i read it in my head, but i can't afford any alternate suggestions, sorry.

Nice poem otherwise. :D

[Yamamoto]

"Yet even though i would like to hug you."

even though I long to hug you?

may that's better? =/

depends on you, you made it :)

[DJ StarScream]

No your veiws count too. Thank you for your veiws on my poem i shall take that into consideration.