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Alerane
09-22-2007, 05:47 AM
Your Silence, My Panic
by Alerane


Silence.
The sting of it.
No response coming,
My heart against my ribs is drumming,
and yet you are still quiet.

Panic.
Feeling the terror.
Had I played the right card?
Were my words just too hard?
In my anger raging like a fever.

Gone.
Everything dissolved.
Between us that something is no more.
Our very beings left to have their war.
This will never be resolved.

Silence. Panic. Gone.
Nothing right, all is wrong.

After all our good days,
We go our separate ways,
When all is said and done
Your silence, too strong surely to bear,
My panic, making me well aware.
As you go from this battle no one has won.







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I wrote this is english class in my agenda book, its uneditted so its more a draft then anything so I hope its okay... ^^;b

Nesquik
09-27-2007, 02:18 AM
Emo.... lol jk
I like it, it has this beat that attracts me <3
Keep the good work Cakey!

Alerane
09-27-2007, 02:21 AM
Thanks dani ^^;

Isis
09-27-2007, 06:08 AM
Its word poetry. You get a good sense of rhythm and the meaning behind it is pretty good. Well done OC :P

Alerane
09-28-2007, 03:42 AM
Thanks taichou ^^

Sin
03-31-2008, 04:51 AM
i agree with Shaz, you did well commander