Abandoned

[Ai]

Abandoned

Lost and disorientated,
Paths leading off in all directions,
The world lies directly ahead,
And at the end of each road.

I must decide before it's too late,
As the road behind is slowly disappearing.
But how does one take a step forward,
When they don't know where they've been.

Lost and alone, Abandoned to time,
Heart beating loudly I kneel and weep.
Where was my guide?
Where is everyone?
Why am I so alone?

Thoughts and comments as always appreciated and taken into consideration and revised.

The only qualm I myself have with this piece is the ending of it so if someone could suggest something it would be great.

[Sin]

It certainly gives off the feeling of being lost and confused as if one were truly abandoned.

[Isis]

Have you considered just having 'why am I so alone?' by itself rather than with the other two questions?

I really liked this poem, cause it really does make you feel like you're lost and abandoned.

[vidDa]

Wow. Just wow. This poem closely resembles most of my dreams. Going forward with no goal, and the path behind you slowly disappearing, abandoning the past and grasping for future.

[zen]

this is easy to relate to.

[Ai]

Have you considered just having 'why am I so alone?' by itself rather than with the other two questions?



Lost and alone, Abandoned to time,
Heart beating loudly I kneel and weep.
Why am I so alone?

Your right it does read better, both with the flow and with the layout of the piece..Thanks for the advice..^^

Wow. Just wow. This poem closely resembles most of my dreams. Going forward with no goal, and the path behind you slowly disappearing, abandoning the past and grasping for future.

As much as i'm glad that someone can relate to my piece so easily I just have to say that that probably isn't the best outlook on life to have although I understand how you feel..<_<