Ideal

[Katen Kyoukotsu]

Ideal

I have just awoken from a deep sleep.
The darkness around me is tangible,
an old friend.
My mouth is dry and my right arm is numb,
both evidence of a restless night spent
tossing and turning
with every abstract thought.
Sleep is dangerous.
Who knows what lurks in the night
just barely out of sight.
Even the best of friends betray.
But I close my eyes.
I am enchanted
I always have been
by my other life,
by my dream.

[Isis]

I like this, its an interesting concept how we let our imaginations get to us, giving us dreams and nightmares, but sometimes they reflect in other ways what we experience through life. There's always that little want to escape away from what we do everyday, or to experience something different.

Awesome job.

[Ai]

It's a really nice piece. Your layout is well suited to the length and the composition of the piece. The flow takes a short while to get started when you begin reading which is a criticism I can give you but once it gets you into it's flow you get a feeling for it really well.

The theme was one which would usually take people down another path in their train of thought and you've approached this with an original idea which I enjoy to read.

9/10.