A bleeding heart

[Sin]

I have a crying heart
and a bleeding soul.
With the coming of every morning,
I can't help but wonder...
what it is that i am living for?
My eyes water and my heart beats,
the blood still blue in my veins
but its red where it bleeds.
The lights fades and the darkness comes.
Without a purpose, i pray tomorrow doesn't come.

[Ai]

Remember capital letters after the end of a sentence or a full stop or comma, Change I am to I'm so that this line reads this instead.

what it is that I'm living for?

This smooths the flow of the piece in this section and makes reading it much more fluid for the audience.

Other then that Its a nice sweet short piece which I enjoyed immensely with a great theme that you've delivered well. Keep up the good work.

[zen]

good poem, it's to short for my opinion, but it's great to read.

[Sin]

good poem, it's to short for my opinion, but it's great to read.

Sometimes saying more just takes away from the beauty of the message. besides you say that about all my poems but you still like em:biggrinki

[Nesquik]

Wow, i love the ending.
It's too short, but i like it's point of view.

[shaberry]

wow...great short poem ^-^ loved it...i look forward to reading the rest of your works ^.^

[Sin]

I hope you like em'