deadly love

[zen]

Rushing to the slaughter
like little lambs off a cliff
one by one
you kill them
There love stricken bodies
fall to the ground
But no regret in their eyes
Your love has poisoned their logic
they see only happiness
in the abyss of your love
in the immortal doom
that will surely be their end
yet they run like hungry animals
to your call
your embrace of death
your deadly love

[silverwolf801]

yo now I know why this got no comments. This is either way to advanced or way to gorey. I mean i would have to read this 2 extra times just to get the full jist of what you are stating in every line. This is some top quality stuff man

[zen]

thanx man that really inspires me too keep going. At first I thought I wasn't writing good enough, but that comment helps thanx alot.

[Sin]

its good dude, it doesn't flow very well but i got the message and i think its best if it doesn't flow. It keeps it raw and bruttish.

[Aina1]

it's very deep and gory and people have think deeply to get the message. Great job :cool: :kitty:

[grim-jow]

thats great cuz keep it up!

[zen]

thnx I'm glad you like it