Reflection

[Toasty]

/Edit: I edited a few typos I noticed upon reading it again.

Reflecting on a sea of thoughts,
I am wistful of things long gone.
I am washed away, falling,
into a moment, dark and delicate.

Upon a glance, I may have seen
beauty in the clouds, wonders in the
sound of rushing waters, and
clarity in the cold chill of reason,

But I am not so fortunate as
to live in that ignorant state.
I am a thinker, lost in my own
dreams and dying at sea.

I look upon the reflection,
the ocean which comes forth
and overcomes me, and I
wonder if I'll drown.

I know that deep down I am but
a mere soul trapped in my own
memory, wanting what I can't have
and flailing - unable to swim.

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Inspired by:
http://freaky665.deviantart.com/art/A-Place-For-My-Head-81241348

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Feel free to C&C. This is a first draft poem... unedited, but inspired and posted. <3.

-Toasty

[zen]

man thats great, at first I was like what but that picture pulled it together for me it really does fit well.

[Toasty]

Thanks, Bludd! I'm glad you liked it.

And I'm glad that it had the effect I wanted. I didn't want it to stand alone. I knew it would need to picture to truly capture the meaning. :) <3.

[Joan]

You really did capture something here yes : )
Love the immagery, makes it so alive!
And you really set a mood for the entire poem, just feeling it.

I like it : ) good job^^

[Sin]

Great piece, really deep. + Rep

[Ai]

A very lovely piece by you and the opening line really sets one in the mood for reading..Just that when I was reading it I got the feeling that instead of "Reflecting on the sea of thoughts" you might want "Reflecting on a sea of thoughts," instead..Just seems to get the flow going a lot better right off the bat there.

Keep them coming if they're all like this..:p