Lost my Concentration

[Alerane]

Lost My Concentration
By Alerane

On my workload piles,
I'm falling behind.
Stress stretches for miles,
I'm losing my mind.

Achievement is lacking,
Opinions no longer strong.
It's not like I'm slacking,
Just every thing's marked wrong.

Motivation is gone,
Lost in the procrastination.
I just don't see why to go on,
I've lost my concentration.

[Chi]

hehe, its cute and the flow ain't bad either

[Alerane]

Thanks Carl. =)

[Isis]

Haha, it is cute and typically Ale :P Best of luck lovie <3

[Freya]

R U a college student? lol j/k because i felt that way in college.
It could be about work too I suppose.
You gave it the feeling of being frantic and distracted. it worked really well.

[SoundWave]

Sweet!.. cute style you got there x]

The rhyme scheme works nicely until the last stanza imo. I don't really have anything constructive to help out with it, since I'm hungry as hell and it's hard to think >.>

well anyways, I might get back to you on that. Liked it loads ^^

[Ai]

/me can relate a lot to this piece.

Only section of it that I found could need a little work on it was the third stanza's first line. It seemed to break up the flow you had set up abruptly with it's shortness and weirdness.

Try rewording that line in my opinion.

and great job by the way.