Desperation

[Chi]

I was born at home
But i haven't been there since
It's been too hard living
Yet I am afraid to die,

I fear that place above the clouds
and the earth's sweet embrace
Death's been a long time coming
but i know now it's near

My life has just begun,
but life is too late and now
my time has now come.
I don't want to die so
I woe the day i was born.

I have to go for a while
Forgive me if i don't come home

[Isis]

You know I dont want you to go, and I really hate that you have to :(

You've been a really good friend, even for the short time I've known you so I'll continue praying for your safety xx

[Joe Black]

There exists a sharp contrast between birth and death which makes this poem stand out the most, and exemplifies how some neither want to lie or die. the flow made the drama right. you have outdone yourself again. i really mean that.

[Lex]

...I love it! The last line just sent goose bumps all over my body!

[Baby-Pie]

you are coming back no matter what you think so hush up with the "Forgive me if i don't come home" wer waiting for your return :) im sure of it , so go with hope and you will come back a winner thru this nightmare

[kakudo]

wow another awsome poem........

[Joan]

That's a poverfull poem. Seriously.
It kept me drawn in the entire time, and I really felt something reading it.

Great poem imo. All I can say..

[Chi]

Thank you, i wrote it in my hour of desperation... i didn't think i conveyed the emotions properly

[SoundWave]

Hah no beatin' around the bush here no..

Solid straightforward poem :)

[Chi]

thanks?

[SoundWave]

Yeah take that as a compliment XD

I was at a loss for words honestly :)

[Ai]

/me puts in his suggestion :p

I was born at home,
I haven't been there since though.
I've been too hard trying to live,
I'm too afraid to die.

I fear that place above the clouds,
The caverns far beneath the ground.
It's been a long time coming since I was born,
But now I know now it's near.

Life had just begun,
Life is too late and my time has come.
I don't want to die so,
I woe the day i was born to die.

I have to go for a while now,
Forgive me if i don't come home.

Everything I can suggest for the piece is in there :p..Sorry if I butchered it just seems to get across what your trying to say better.

7/10 for the original piece though I really like the concept and the way you portrayed it.

[smach]

...good stuff indeed...i should prolly start visiting the literature area more frequently than i currently do.

[Chi]

OMG... SMACH in poetry section :o
hehe :p

Thanks