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Ren
05-21-2008, 12:11 PM
Yosh, here's the challenge for 11th Division ^^
Write a short story based on the picture below:
http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/1065/knighthh3.png
(thanks joJo for the pic)

Purpose:
- to get our writing section back up
- to get members with writing talent to be more involved in div activities
- to raise activity level as a division (and by competing in a competition such as this, will hopefully get the other participating division's activity level up too)
- to promote healthy competition between divisions

Rules & regulations:
1. Each participating team will have to submit 2 stories.
2. Genre: anything you wish, as long as it fits with the pic given
3. Length of story: 250-350 words.
4. No plagiarism, excessive or explicit swearing, or R18+ stuff *.*
5. Please do not spam this thread. If you have any questions, kindly PM them to me :)

Contest ends: 5th June 2008 (that's about 2 weeks from now).

Submission:
1. Captain / Vice-captain / person appointed by your division, please post your team's entries here.
2. Name of writers are not required while the challenge is still ongoing. However, once voting is over and the winner has been chosen, please state your writers name here (for +rep purpose).

Judging:
Entries will be opened for voting by public CB members.
A reminder for voters: Please judge for ALL stories to ensure each entry has an equal number of ppl voting on it.

Prize:
Winning entries will get +rep from RenRen & Kensei, and a feature in the CBNL \o/
[edit]Also +rep from the 4th Div. VC, Barbaroi. (Thanks for the support! =D)

Voting begins now, and ends in 3 days, on the 8th June 2008.
Please judge the entries by giving marks out of 5.
Example:
Team A:
Story 1: 3.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

Team B:
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

Division with the most points wins :)
Good luck!

__________________________________________________ _____________

Here are the stories:

6th Division

He rode his white horse through the endless mountains, seeking the pass to the north. His white hair flared in the wind, as he rode time and again through those rises and falls, often having to force his weary stallion over chasms and pitfalls. As he led his white steed over a particularly nasty drop, he almost smiled at the irony of his existence, the endless trudging through the mountain, clad in silvery white. He was the very image of a white knight in shiny armour, but he had no princess with him, no dragon to slay.

It was hardly a few weeks ago that he entered those mountains. He was yet another adventurer; believing and dreaming that he would slay the dragon, save the princess, become a legend. Now he was faced with the harsh reality of the realms. Dragons were not so common and princesses did not tend to sit on high towers awaiting their saviour. And he, famished and thirsty, felt it was the end.

He lifted hazy eyes and suddenly saw several ancient columns rising in front of him. He reached a valley below the mountain where the remains of an ancient building still stood, particularly a stony crest covered in moss here and there. Whatever was here, white and proud, was long since gone. Just like the knight.

Or perhaps not… he searched more carefully and noted several tracks on the pure white marble of the floor. Those claw marks could only be made by a giant, clawed leg… the leg of a mighty dragon. He smiled thinly to himself, looking down on his white armour. He will make his own dragon, and his own legend.

He will live forever in the memories of others. He will call down the dragon.

He will be the black knight in tarnished armour.
As the sun crested the distant hilltops, the rays cast upon the ruinous landscape pressed the shadows afar. Small creatures had since returned since the clamor of war no longer touched this land. The rider noticed no other life in this barren place which was once proud Gilead.

Two months had passed since the last of the castle’s citizens had run to distant lands or been slain. Of all those charged with the protection of Gilead, the noble and unfaltering Templar Guardsmen, to his knowledge only one had been such a disgrace to the lineage of his fathers to flee from the sight of the advancing hordes.

Carefully walking his mount through the disarray of broken stone and twisted corpses, the Templar Guardsmen was forced to identify former friends, rivals and teachers by the pendants they wore. Each family had a unique emblem, to identify the lineage.

Yet here was one corpse, dressed in the Templar armor, sans pendant. Since none could bear the shield of the Guardsmen without being borne into nobility, he knew this was the corpse he sought. His father was forced to pass on his shield before death in battle, as his leg had been rendered lame. Yet even still, with a coward for a son, the family’s honor was dismantled singlehandedly after generation upon generation of coveted service and nobility.

In such dire times as the impending horde of the Diseased Ones, nobody would have denied such an able duelist, even advanced in years and lame of the leg. Placing the pendant upon his desiccated chest, the unworthy son prayed for his relief in the afterlife, hour after hour he prayed. Not for forgiveness, he would never achieve that.

As he prayed, unmoving, one of the lemming-like rodents crept onto his leather shoe. Mistaking him for a fresher source of meal, bit.

Four days later, a disease set into his leg which blackened the appendage, the man mused that he would meet such a fitting fate. A coward dies a cowards death, a man dies a man’s death. All is right with the world.

11th Division

Like the battle drums of war, the hooves stampeded upon the stone beneath the horse. The rhythm echoed throughout the ruins, trailing off into the ever-flowing white mist which encased it; the sun was radiant, causing the whiteness to sparkle.

“Steady.” His voice whispered smoothly, bringing the ivory white horse he rode to a halt.

He looked above him, quickly spotting what was left of the grand arches that signaled ones arrival to paradise. Tattered, torn, and crumbled, the once great stone structures maintained their heights - just barely.

The man took more time to take in his surroundings, noting the high mountains and endless plains. There were many blind spots, places for ambushes, spaces vast enough to hold countless men upon it - those living, and those who had fallen.

Off in the distance, he could see what appeared to be an endless swarm of silhouettes, their dark figures nearly blacking out the white ambience.

The battlefield was just up ahead. A sudden chill rose up his spine, causing him to shiver slightly.

Closing his eyes, he could hear it - the sound of conflict. Silver steel clanked loudly beneath the hill he rested upon, their loud collisions sending shockwaves of sound throughout the otherwise dead silent ruins.

“So, it has already begun.”

Black smoke began to rise; somewhere amidst the chaotic war, a fire had been set. Slowly, the darkness devoured the brilliant shine given off by the sun above. Blackness fell, corroding away the glistening white mist to morph the mountains into an abyss which one could barely see.

The warrior unsheathed his blade, slashing it horizontally in front of him in order to part the smoke. An ivory glow emitted from the steel - its great radiance purifying the darkness.

“It is time. Though the battle has already begun, I shall march forth, and lay waste to all those who dare stand before me. Thus is the way of a White Mare - the mercenaries of great valor! This battlefield shall know thy name!”


Slow heavy hoof steps send waves across the valleys stonewall, disturbing the serene silenced even senseless atmosphere. The source revealed, a gray spotted horse emerges from the swampy mist coving this eary valley cobble path. It’s rider lifeless letting loose her limbs to each side of the trusted companion. Usually white cloaks, now blood ridden and torn from intense game of survival. One last dagger the back of her waist and dangling wooden flask tied to her wrist her only possessions.

Moisture and blood converse to pellets pushing a stream from shoulder to finger tip as she lifts and swallows a desperate gulp of the brew.

“Breathe.” She thought. “He said to breath deep!”

Her blood leaking lungs cause a cough, which rushes to her head to set off an explosion!
Reality becomes toyed and crossed into dimensions no longer upon her friends back. Physical she lays lifeless but mental peaking orgasms of colors, shapes, tastes, touches a state of joy to run you insane, manifests as running through veins of every material or spiritual plain mingling and mixing, all organizing in material realization!
As though blindfolded then awakened insight in pure form a fresh born mental state.
“Seeing the air I suck in?” Eyes wide, panic!

“Breathe.” It echoes through her mind.

A big chug fallowed by deep breath, her lungs open and shut with a heavy cough. She cuts it short as her ears rung with fallowing footsteps, 5 on foot heavy steps of murdering nature.

She leans to her companion to encourage, “can we run? Lets breeze!” His response right away as he bolts with all might but trips and collapses, finally bled out.

In this inhuman state of mind ecstasy turns to boils and joy to rampage as she lusts bloods satisfaction.
An arrow spits past ignored to her side. Crying blazing eyes. The last thing he saw and daggers part scull as easy as fog, as the earth thumped thrice in rhythm.
Now unarmed she waits throwing fits of rage. Mash is what she calls it, every knuckle she will break.

A Beasts Instinct.

doobiesnacks
05-23-2008, 05:07 AM
man eleventh division is gonne kick ass all over up and down this bitach!!

come prove other wise punks!:adflex:

we're stuffin out the word count!!

doobiesnacks
05-27-2008, 05:51 PM
psht.. what is this? EVERYONE is to frightened by elevenths great might to speak up? psht!!

:P

seriously though.. where is everyone?? YOu call yourselves part of the Gotei eh? then get to it!

Tyekanik
05-27-2008, 06:04 PM
We have been trying to motivate ourselves

Good things come to those who wait XD

♥ Tess
05-27-2008, 08:46 PM
good luck teams! :cheer:

Yamamoto
05-27-2008, 10:40 PM
Someone's impatient :)

You can't dish out good stories in a short time :p

and Thanks Tess ^^

doobiesnacks
05-28-2008, 09:27 AM
hell yah man.. get it on!

no one else enjoys fun trash talk? http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g138/mateff/smilies/booty.gif

Yamamoto
05-28-2008, 10:10 AM
why waste your vocab on trash talk when you can use it to write awesome stories? :p

Pyramus
05-28-2008, 05:07 PM
It's because he has no awesome stories, so he is writing here instead :)

doobiesnacks
05-28-2008, 07:18 PM
ooooooor we have a story to pulverize any competition and im just can't wait to rock your tights n skirt wearin world!!

bring it, bring it!! :D

..wait, why is this challenge just for eleventh? You callen us out? *becomes double intense* :P .. *scratches head* man im slow

Tyekanik
06-02-2008, 01:39 PM
Oh yeah, choosing our final contestants! Hard to pick from so very many well written masterpieces though =\

XD

Harley Quinn
06-04-2008, 06:34 PM
It's because he has no awesome stories, so he is writing here instead :)

Just because you're inept at at doing two things at once doesn't mean we are.:whatevah:

Hows that for trash talk matt? Reckon it's good enough?XD

Tyekanik
06-04-2008, 06:55 PM
3.2 out of 10 :p

The stories shall speak for themselves as of tomorrow though. We have our 2 ready to go.

Harley Quinn
06-04-2008, 07:07 PM
Very true, I'm not sure what the situation is with ours. We have stories, lots of em', but I'm not sure when the voting stops. Must be soon.....

Oh, and I don't recall asking you, I asked matt. ;p

Tyekanik
06-04-2008, 07:11 PM
haha :p

Yeeeeah lot of stories, bet you only had eh, FOUR!

>.>

<.<

nobody will notice.

Harley Quinn
06-04-2008, 09:59 PM
Well I'd consider four to be alot for a div that just likes to arse around and party!^^

Oh yes they will, of course they will, you can't post in a public thread adn not have them notice.......yeah not sure where that one was going.

doobiesnacks
06-05-2008, 05:12 AM
none of this trash talk impressed me guys.. you are supposed to make fun and be silly belligerent.

I didnt see ONE your momma joke.. *shakes head*

4.3 on the trash talk

Yamamoto
06-05-2008, 05:22 AM
your momma jokes are overrated :)

and might i suggest we cease this now and let our stories do the talking =)

doobiesnacks
06-05-2008, 05:28 AM
sighohsomighty :whatevah:

so dry no joke no cut up, *deep voice* so eeeearnest.

alright alright.. so where do we post this? in here? ok..



Like the battle drums of war, the hooves stampeded upon the stone beneath the horse. The rhythm echoed throughout the ruins, trailing off into the ever-flowing white mist which encased it; the sun was radiant, causing the whiteness to sparkle.

“Steady.” His voice whispered smoothly, bringing the ivory white horse he rode to a halt.

He looked above him, quickly spotting what was left of the grand arches that signaled ones arrival to paradise. Tattered, torn, and crumbled, the once great stone structures maintained their heights - just barely.

The man took more time to take in his surroundings, noting the high mountains and endless plains. There were many blind spots, places for ambushes, spaces vast enough to hold countless men upon it - those living, and those who had fallen.

Off in the distance, he could see what appeared to be an endless swarm of silhouettes, their dark figures nearly blacking out the white ambience.

The battlefield was just up ahead. A sudden chill rose up his spine, causing him to shiver slightly.

Closing his eyes, he could hear it - the sound of conflict. Silver steel clanked loudly beneath the hill he rested upon, their loud collisions sending shockwaves of sound throughout the otherwise dead silent ruins.

“So, it has already begun.”

Black smoke began to rise; somewhere amidst the chaotic war, a fire had been set. Slowly, the darkness devoured the brilliant shine given off by the sun above. Blackness fell, corroding away the glistening white mist to morph the mountains into an abyss which one could barely see.

The warrior unsheathed his blade, slashing it horizontally in front of him in order to part the smoke. An ivory glow emitted from the steel - its great radiance purifying the darkness.

“It is time. Though the battle has already begun, I shall march forth, and lay waste to all those who dare stand before me. Thus is the way of a White Mare - the mercenaries of great valor! This battlefield shall know thy name!”




Slow heavy hoof steps send waves across the valleys stonewall, disturbing the serene silenced even senseless atmosphere. The source revealed, a gray spotted horse emerges from the swampy mist coving this eary valley cobble path. It’s rider lifeless letting loose her limbs to each side of the trusted companion. Usually white cloaks, now blood ridden and torn from intense game of survival. One last dagger the back of her waist and dangling wooden flask tied to her wrist her only possessions.

Moisture and blood converse to pellets pushing a stream from shoulder to finger tip as she lifts and swallows a desperate gulp of the brew.

“Breathe.” She thought. “He said to breath deep!”

Her blood leaking lungs cause a cough, which rushes to her head to set off an explosion!
Reality becomes toyed and crossed into dimensions no longer upon her friends back. Physical she lays lifeless but mental peaking orgasms of colors, shapes, tastes, touches a state of joy to run you insane, manifests as running through veins of every material or spiritual plain mingling and mixing, all organizing in material realization!
As though blindfolded then awakened insight in pure form a fresh born mental state.
“Seeing the air I suck in?” Eyes wide, panic!

“Breathe.” It echoes through her mind.

A big chug fallowed by deep breath, her lungs open and shut with a heavy cough. She cuts it short as her ears rung with fallowing footsteps, 5 on foot heavy steps of murdering nature.

She leans to her companion to encourage, “can we run? Lets breeze!” His response right away as he bolts with all might but trips and collapses, finally bled out.

In this inhuman state of mind ecstasy turns to boils and joy to rampage as she lusts bloods satisfaction.
An arrow spits past ignored to her side. Crying blazing eyes. The last thing he saw and daggers part scull as easy as fog, as the earth thumped thrice in rhythm.
Now unarmed she waits throwing fits of rage. Mash is what she calls it, every knuckle she will break.

A Beasts Instinct.

Ren
06-05-2008, 11:48 AM
6th Division



He rode his white horse through the endless mountains, seeking the pass to the north. His white hair flared in the wind, as he rode time and again through those rises and falls, often having to force his weary stallion over chasms and pitfalls. As he led his white steed over a particularly nasty drop, he almost smiled at the irony of his existence, the endless trudging through the mountain, clad in silvery white. He was the very image of a white knight in shiny armour, but he had no princess with him, no dragon to slay.

It was hardly a few weeks ago that he entered those mountains. He was yet another adventurer; believing and dreaming that he would slay the dragon, save the princess, become a legend. Now he was faced with the harsh reality of the realms. Dragons were not so common and princesses did not tend to sit on high towers awaiting their saviour. And he, famished and thirsty, felt it was the end.

He lifted hazy eyes and suddenly saw several ancient columns rising in front of him. He reached a valley below the mountain where the remains of an ancient building still stood, particularly a stony crest covered in moss here and there. Whatever was here, white and proud, was long since gone. Just like the knight.

Or perhaps not… he searched more carefully and noted several tracks on the pure white marble of the floor. Those claw marks could only be made by a giant, clawed leg… the leg of a mighty dragon. He smiled thinly to himself, looking down on his white armour. He will make his own dragon, and his own legend.

He will live forever in the memories of others. He will call down the dragon.

He will be the black knight in tarnished armour.

As the sun crested the distant hilltops, the rays cast upon the ruinous landscape pressed the shadows afar. Small creatures had since returned since the clamor of war no longer touched this land. The rider noticed no other life in this barren place which was once proud Gilead.

Two months had passed since the last of the castle’s citizens had run to distant lands or been slain. Of all those charged with the protection of Gilead, the noble and unfaltering Templar Guardsmen, to his knowledge only one had been such a disgrace to the lineage of his fathers to flee from the sight of the advancing hordes.

Carefully walking his mount through the disarray of broken stone and twisted corpses, the Templar Guardsmen was forced to identify former friends, rivals and teachers by the pendants they wore. Each family had a unique emblem, to identify the lineage.

Yet here was one corpse, dressed in the Templar armor, sans pendant. Since none could bear the shield of the Guardsmen without being borne into nobility, he knew this was the corpse he sought. His father was forced to pass on his shield before death in battle, as his leg had been rendered lame. Yet even still, with a coward for a son, the family’s honor was dismantled singlehandedly after generation upon generation of coveted service and nobility.

In such dire times as the impending horde of the Diseased Ones, nobody would have denied such an able duelist, even advanced in years and lame of the leg. Placing the pendant upon his desiccated chest, the unworthy son prayed for his relief in the afterlife, hour after hour he prayed. Not for forgiveness, he would never achieve that.

As he prayed, unmoving, one of the lemming-like rodents crept onto his leather shoe. Mistaking him for a fresher source of meal, bit.

Four days later, a disease set into his leg which blackened the appendage, the man mused that he would meet such a fitting fate. A coward dies a cowards death, a man dies a man’s death. All is right with the world.

I will edit the 1st post with the stories as well.

Voting ends in 3 days, on the 8th June 2008.

Good luck to both teams :)

Ai
06-06-2008, 08:12 AM
/votes for the 11th divisions 1st story.

Yamamoto
06-06-2008, 08:20 AM
Sorry, just a reminder frpm the first post- this is the voting/scoring system :)

Good luck to all


Voting begins now, and ends in 3 days, on the 8th June 2008.
Please judge the entries by giving marks out of 5.
Example:
Team A:
Story 1: 3.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

Team B:
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

Division with the most points wins
Good luck!

Asuka
06-06-2008, 09:15 PM
6th Division:
Story 1: 4/5
Story 2: 4.5/5

11th Division:
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 3.5/5

Good job guys, I enjoyed everyone! ^^

Fect
06-07-2008, 04:47 AM
6th Division:
Story 1: 4.2/5
Story 2: 4.5/5

11th Division:
Story 1: 4.3/5
Story 2: 4/5

I have judged. Now to sleep.

Reco
06-07-2008, 04:52 AM
6th Division
Story 1: 4/5
Story 2: 4.5/5

11th Division
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

Dexter
06-07-2008, 05:03 AM
11th Division:
Story 1: 4.4/5
Story 2: 3.5/5

6th Division:
Story 1: 4.3/5
Story 2: 4/5

Seff vi Britannia
06-07-2008, 07:56 AM
6th

1st: 4/5
2nd: 4/5

11th

1st: 3/5
2nd: 3.5/5

Askand
06-07-2008, 02:21 PM
Voting begins now, and ends in 3 days, on the 8th June 2008.

11th division:
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 3.5/5

Team 6th:
Story 1: 3.5/5
Story 2: 4.5/5

*Bows Respectfully*

Good job guys^^

Mr. Killa
06-07-2008, 06:56 PM
11th division:
Story 1: 4.5/5
Story 2: 4/5

6th division:
Story 1: 4/5
Story 2: 4.5/5

:babies:

Ren
06-09-2008, 04:58 AM
Thank you for all your votes. I'll edit this with the results. :)

Yamamoto
06-09-2008, 12:40 PM
Thank you again for the votes :), here are the results:


6th Division
Story 1: 28
Story 2: 30.5
Total: 58.5

11th Division
Story 1: 29.7
Story 2: 26
Total: 55.7

Well done to all teams :D

Winning stories will be featured in the CBNL as well as the authors repped by me, Renren and Barbaroi


Congratulations to everyone who participated, and as promised we will reveal the storytellers for each one ^^;

Story #1 - Undying

Story #2 - Tyekanik

Silhouette
06-09-2008, 01:25 PM
Ugh. That spite voting from a certain someone didn't help. :rolleye09

Congrats, 6th Division. I guess I'll rep your two writers also, as for ours:

Story #1 - Silhouette (moi)

Story #2 - doobie snacks

Dexter
06-09-2008, 01:37 PM
lulz. Seems Sess beat Und by 0.1 on my votes :P

I honestly forgot that you may have been writing, Sess, but when I went back to it later I thought it could have been yours. As for Und, I didn't even know he would take part, since he "officially" came back after this contest had begun.

I had the most trouble allocating votes to the first story of each.. so I used a minusing points system for all from there on out, which was why both of yours weren't to a factor of 0.5


Anywho - congrats 6th Div!

Undying
06-09-2008, 02:01 PM
Lawl.

Congrats Sesspoo.

And um, yeah. I participated despite not being "officially" back.

Ren
06-09-2008, 02:51 PM
Thanks for posting the results, kensie. I had a few hours of blackout so i couldnt get online =_=

Anyway, congrats to Tye and Und for the stories, and well done to the 11th division as well. Was a close competition ^^b

And before we wrap things up, thank yous for:

11th for participating in this. This was fun, perhaps we can do this again some other time eh? :D

Also to Barbaroi, for the support and rep prize, and to those who had taken the time to read and vote for the entries.

CBNL for the permission to feature the stories in the newsletter.

Cheers! :Domo

doobiesnacks
06-09-2008, 04:31 PM
well.. we still kick your ass and your mom is fat!! hahahaha jk.. awesome job guys!!! ..and yes, we get a re-match Ren!! :P

beer pong anyone? :P

Undying
06-09-2008, 04:44 PM
Yo momma is so fat, when she walks backwards there's a siren! :D Yo momma jokes are old.

I already congratulated Sessy, but congrats to 11th as a whole :D. We'll beat compete against you in the future again.

Tyekanik
06-09-2008, 05:11 PM
Big grats to all the contestants, and thanks for the votes ^_^

Mr. Killa
06-09-2008, 05:54 PM
good job everyone :p

Katen Kyoukotsu
06-09-2008, 06:02 PM
/votes for the 11th divisions 1st story.

Hmm I notice this was never recounted.

If we judged this as

11's 1st story:5/5
11's 2cd stiry:0/5

6's 1st: 0/5
6's 2cd: 0/5

Then it would technically have been our win no?

*sweeps his cape around him and exits the room

Ren
06-10-2008, 04:17 AM
Judging:
Entries will be opened for voting by public CB members.
A reminder for voters: Please judge for ALL stories to ensure each entry has an equal number of ppl voting on it.



Since Ai didnt edit his post with full judging, i did not count his vote in.

But thank you for mentioning it anyway. We'll take this into consideration for our future challenges and make sure everyone gets equal voting :3