Goodnight

[Chi]

I hear it now,
right around the corner.
It's step's echo
but there's no where,
no where to go.
Within the darkness,
I lost my resolve
to face death.
In that darkness,
I broke the
chains of fate.
In the darkness,
my cycle will end.
Now i can sleep
peacefully for
the rest of eternity...

[Joan]

Oh my...

That was, a very special poem!

gj again chi:)

[Chi]

hehe sleep is the cousin of death!! so i finally fell asleep

[rapidark]

very good but try reading it while listening to everything goes dark by the Hoosiers >.>

[Ai]

A nice piece to read, however the flow gets broken up early on in the piece with the duplicate words at around line 5 however if you intended this to happen then very well done..If not then work on your flow more with this piece..

Other then that I loved the piece and enjoy reading your work.

[Chi]

Yep it was intentional to symbolize the break in the cycle :p

[zen]

suuuurrre it was, we believe you ole' master of poetry chi......Great poem though, it seems unfinished to me, but I guess thats just part of the plan also :p

[Chi]

haha, it was part of the plan since its about ending (unfinished ending) and breaking the cycle (broken flow) before it repeats and continues.