All alone

[Shikaku]

Alone, all alone,
And so lonesome,
No one to talk to,
No one to love,
All by myself,
No one who cares,
People all around,
And im all alone.

I know it sucks but it was the first poem i ever wrote and i aint going to change it.

[Ai]

Its a nice go for the first piece you've ever written in the next piece try focusing more on your layout of your words so that the flow of your piece becomes more smoother throughout it.

Other then that congrats for posting your first piece here..

[ladyrukia]

wow shikaku that was really good. and i feel like that alot. the flow was good and smooth

[Sin]

i really kinda like this one but Ai said everything i wanted to so... >.>