One of my own poem

[Kenshin0o8]

A STRANGER PAIN

Can't sleep, close my eye picture smile
Never got enough sorrow! i still smile
My live in stress in the deepness
days and night are pain,- like robbers

so listen...

Here is a history of a boy...
Who's tell me his royalties
Come for the fight, to the end
Fought for the best never gave up for the rest
I wonder how hard it could be
To be punished in this society
And feel so lonely
Walk home, and feel the judgment moment forward in your eye

He said...

It was so hard for me
I thought i was searching for the sun even it was covered by sky
Can't enplane my pain
every pain make my word dark, strange feelings so i thought to fly

I couldn't imagine such a pain on my own
so i cleared my tears walked away at my own
I looked up to the mirror to see the "Boy"
there was so many pain i closed my eyes

My soul didn't left that alone
so i felt guilty, my own
O' Lord I, ain't strong
Give me strange to fight alone

For...

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I wrote this poem cause, i heard a history of a boy... I hope u like it :D

[Joe Black]

your use of punctuation is effective for the breaks and flow of the poem. just remember to proofread to polish sentences as a whole to communicate the point more effectively.

[Kenshin0o8]

I shall remember thanks for the feedback :D