A Maturity of the Mind

[Mendelson Shape]

hearts and arrows,
whims and flings,
boys and girls,
involved in such things

live, love, share, believe
in dreams, stories, ambitions conceived,
ignore your hearts,
follow your minds,
everything else shall come,
one at a time

don't rush what isn't meant to happen,
yet...life is short enough without anxiety,
live the dreams, savor the tastes,
and time shall take you,
with aging grace.

[Toasty]

I really enjoyed reading this poem, Fresh. :)

There didn't seem to be a set rhyming scheme; this made it a bit hard to read at times, but the overall poem was a pleasure. There were two lines that seemed to make me stumble as I read them:

everything else shall come,
one at a time

Perhaps writing:

Everything else
Shall come with time

Would flow better?

I loved the last two lines. They were my favorites in the poem. There was a resolve to them and the words were just beautiful. Well, great job! Keep writing!

Also, check out the Poetry Corner, a usergroup here on CB. It might be of interest to you.

[Decado]

Nice work FF. As Toasty said, was a pleasure to read :)

concieved
Typo. Conceived*

I also like these two lines a lot:
ignore your hearts,
follow your minds,

Contrary to what we're usually made to accept. It has far branching consequences in many directions...

[Mendelson Shape]

thanks everyone...i decided to take a break from all the love stuff and write like a grown up.

[Do'Urden]

life is short enough without anxiety,


That's excellent, it's got a lot of truth in it.

Overall it's a good message, but could use some grammatical tweaks, and the flow is definitely choppy. Still good though, and props for putting it out there to read. However life isn't that happy, in my opinion anyways. Guess that's what writing is about though, expressing yourself, not appeasing opinions.