Peace

[Shikaku]

Peace, never acheived,
We say we want it,
But do we deceive,
Never here or there,
Is it anywhere,
Does it exist,
Or is it a lie,
Only in death,
Is peace fulfilled.

[Chi]

Try working on your wording a bit more, its a good thought process but grammatically it needs work.

[Do'Urden]

Like Chi said, it's a good thought, but that doesn't really mean much. You have to work on taking those thoughts and making them flow together. It can take time, so if you enjoy writing just stick with it, it'll come.

[vidDa]

Cut the song a little :

"Peace, never achieved,
We say we want it,
But do we deceive,
Never here or there,
Is it anywhere??

Does it exist,
Or is it a lie,
Only in death,
Is peace fulfilled."

The flow is good, xcept for the last line. but anyway, a good try. Work on it and will be staying to CnC you again ^^