America

[Chi]

All in all I feel I have lost
the love i had for thee.
I won't sugar coat my words
I won't hide my disappointment.
The indications are strong that
the implications of the things
that we must accomplish
have lost some perspective,
aren't wrong. You've just become
too blinded by your ambitions
to see how far we strayed off course.
I once had no misgivings,
not even a shred of what
could be perceived as a lack of confidence
in the words you spoke to me.
My courage did not halt
and when the time came to protect you
I did not falter, I did as any man would
to protect the one he loved.
For all the things you've done for me
I feel I owed you a debt that could never
be re-payed unless my blood was spilled
to protect you from harm.
You once made me feel that
to die for you was the greatest honor
I could have. Yet here i am
alive and well seeking comfort elsewhere.
I no longer see it fit to say i love you.
So my dear I am leaving you now
and wishing you a very goodnight and
I pray you see a better tomorrow.

[Joe Black]

this poem is one of my favorites from you, as it captures both the love for your country, while also mirroring this love to that of a romantic relationship.

+rep

[Saiyuri]

Beautiful!! I really like this poem Chi!

Great job ^^

+Rep

[Isis]

My dear Carl, third last line. I'm instead of am.

As for the content of this poem, it is most heartfelt. There is a portrayal of many things and I enjoyed the fragility and emotion that came through it. This is most definitely one of your best works <3

[Askand]

Loved the flow intentionally accidental.
And you got me on the meaning I thought it was a poem about the country for the title then the body told me a different thing so it was a nice choice of words ^^

reps

[Chi]

haha! It's essentially a break note being written to the country of america, its using experience with women to fuel the words behind it.

THanks

[Do'Urden]

Wow. I ****ing love it. You just gave a synopsis of my life the least two years. It's sick.

REP

[Chi]

Yeah i wrote if from both a soldier and a lover's perspective so it's really easy to relate too if you can get past the tittle haha

[Lusania]

N i c e

R e p ^^

[Chi]

Thank you glad you enjoyed it

[Evanesque]

Well I might not put this in the right format so excuse me..but me thinks you're voicing how you feel toward a country where you were born. You've stood up, defended and fought for your homeland...but because its change in ideals, you're slowly losing that strong bond and dedication you used to have. You still love and respect America yet dislike it for the things it strives for.

Pretty awesome, Carl! :)
Feel free to correct me >.>

[Chi]

Umm... only wrong part is that i wasn't born here. And it's a break-up note being written to the country, using experience from a failed relationship i found the words to use to write it.

[BeeCrest]

I won't sugar coat my words

Props because you didn't do this :) I was slightly worried that you would, judging by the length of the post. However you didn't. You kept to a explanatory and direct style.