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Mendelson Shape
06-13-2008, 04:31 AM
Look into her watery eyes of blue,
see her looking back at you,
feel the emotions in you run high,
taste the desire, an attempt to try

she's all yours, hold out your hand,
grasp hers tightly, make her understand,
you're here with her at this moment,
a gift of love, for her to interpret

bring her close, breaths' misty compilation,
arms around her tightening, an intimate relation,
heads come closer, into the creeping anxiety,
kiss her slowly......
and love her madly.

Sin
06-13-2008, 08:58 AM
"Look into her blue watery eyes,
see her looking back at you,
feel the emotions in you run high,
taste the desire, an attempt to try
to make it all work for you

she's all yours, hold out your hand,
grab hers tightly, make her understand,
you're here with her at this moment,
a gift of love, for her to interpret

bring her close, breaths' misty compilation,
arms around her tightening, an intimate relation,
heads come closer, into the creeping anxiety,
kiss her slowly......
and love her madly."

a few suggestions to make it work a lil better, but its up to you. I like how it ends though good work

Mendelson Shape
06-13-2008, 02:04 PM
watery eyes of blue and blue watery eyes are the same thing. i didn't want to write grab in the second stanza because it sounded a bit crude.

Sin
06-14-2008, 01:42 AM
it does sound crude but grasp sounds a bit forced, it's still good