Welcome, a poem

[alieraisu]

*DISCLAIMER* I OWN THIS POEM! IN FACT I HAVE IT COPYRIGHTED!!!!!!!!! IT HAS BEEN PUBLISHED... THIS HAVING BEEN SAID, I HOPE THAT NOONE HERE IS SO LOW IN DIGNITY AS TO TRY TO STEAL SOMEONE ELSE'S WORK! IT'S BEYOND DISGRACEFUL.... ESPECIALLY IF YOU YOURSELF ARE A WRITER! SO JUST DON'T DO IT. HOPEFULLY I WRITE THIS NEEDLESSLY, FOR I PLACE GREAT FAITH IN MY FELLOW HUMAN, BELIEVING WE ARE ALL INHERENTLY GOOD. THANKS, ENJOY THE POEM


~Welcome~
Welcome to my house, I open my doors
Welcome to my wealth, though I am poor
Welcome to the smile I wear every day
It may only last a while, but who is to say
Welcome to my heart, open to all
Welcome to my love, pure and raw
Welcome to the knowledge I openly share
When we part ways, kindle it with care
You are welcome to take some of me with you
And I, in turn, shall remember you.

[Pipp-ORK]

Haha, that's really good (needless to say; it was PUBLISHED, dammit! :D). It has a nice flow to it, and I like your choice of words. (I wish I could write poetry, heehee.)

[Felonious Funk]

*DISCLAIMER* I OWN THIS POEM! IN FACT I HAVE IT COPYRIGHTED!!!!!!!!! IT HAS BEEN PUBLISHED... THIS HAVING BEEN SAID, I HOPE THAT NOONE HERE IS SO LOW IN DIGNITY AS TO TRY TO STEAL SOMEONE ELSE'S WORK! IT'S BEYOND DISGRACEFUL.... ESPECIALLY IF YOU YOURSELF ARE A WRITER! SO JUST DON'T DO IT. HOPEFULLY I WRITE THIS NEEDLESSLY, FOR I PLACE GREAT FAITH IN MY FELLOW HUMAN, BELIEVING WE ARE ALL INHERENTLY GOOD. THANKS, ENJOY THE POEM
~Welcome~
Welcome to my house, I open my doors
Welcome to my wealth, though I am poor
Welcome to the smile I wear every day
It may only last a while, but who is to say
Welcome to my heart, open to all
Welcome to my love, pure and raw
Welcome to the knowledge I openly share
When we part ways, kindle it with care
You are welcome to take some of me with you
And I, in turn, shall remember you.


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[alieraisu]

whoot a response AND a giant thumb's up. what more could a writer ask for... wrell... erm... except moneyu.... but i dont like that stuff, you can't eat it! lol! mebe moofins! they're good... and delicious!

here's another published. its a personal favorite of mine:

Owl (Night Pacer)
My heart tender and vicious both,
quiet in the night.
Silent, dark, mysterious,
I hide away from light.
Senses keen and hyperactive,
piercing as a blade.
I take flight but never disturb
the silence night has made.
Darkness holds a sacredness
day can never own.
I tend it like a dying flame,
it is my job alone.
Bookish wisdom I have none,
it is foolish knowledge to hold.
Mine are secrets dark and deep,
holy,weathered, old.
A solitery wanderer
with knowledge I can't share.
Destined to live a lonely life,
to pace the ink-black air.


p.s. you can read more on www.poetry.com. that's where all my stuff is published and its a great site. if you submit a poem to them it'll most likely be published. it goes into an anthology, and people buy them to look for new up and coming poets.

[Pipp-ORK]

....GAWD. That one's awesomely, amazingly, awesome-O-ly GOOD, TOO! :doindadom

Heehee, you definitely have a knack for writing poetry! :D Domo says, "PHO' SHO". :doindadom

[alieraisu]

heh, thanks.... sadly this is all old stuff and ive suffered writers block for over a year now.

[Byakuya7]

great poems, im sure you'll get out of your writers block soon.

[Sunfire249]

Lol, I love your welcoem poem... Especially the second verse ^_^

[alieraisu]

Lol, I love your welcoem poem... Especially the second verse ^_^

really? what intrigues you so about my second verse? I'm interested to know

[maximoose666]

Good job on the poem in general :)

It may only last a while, but who is to say
Interesting how you punctuated this verse... I would have expected something at the end of the line, maybe something like "It may only last a while - but who is to say?"
I presume you deliberately avoided that.. and if so, wanna explain why? :)

[Neve]

Great job on the poems in general =).

I think you might consider replacing 'you' with a different word in 'welcome' - it disrupts the flow of the rhyming scheme a little to have 'you' rhyming with 'you'. Other than that great poem.

The second is even better =). I would replace "it is" with "it's" in the line
it is foolish knowledge to hold
I don't know why - I think it just flows better that way =).

[Lolable]

lovely i love them ...i want more T.T

[Endess Wings]

Yes yes very well done! Keep it up?

[Sanzora]

First reaction: Ah wow… Absolutely beautiful. Thank you for sharing :)

[MatsumotoRangiku]

Wow this poem is good I dont mind if it is old stuff cause it is good no matter how old or new it is.